My Dear Angel

Also....again....got bored at school c:

There's a certain sadness
in her ocean blue eyes
Every day you think
you hear her cries

She bothers not
to say a word
Because she knows
it will not be heard

We know her smiles
are normally fake
But she goes through the day
like a piece of cake

We know her home life's
not the best
But her parents say its a test
a test...

She comes to school
covered in scars
You see them
as she gets out of her car

She gets straight A's
but it's never enough
Her parents always call it
a bluff

I hear she cuts
across her wrists
I know she has
only one wish

She wants to feel loved
she wants to have faith
But she wants to run
make an escape

I see doubt
in her pretty blue eyes
But im sorry my angel
Every one dies

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

My goodness!! I started to fall in love with this girl and then by the end..... with all-to-real surrealism, there's that reminder of how fragile things are. The threat of losing and leaving all these great things that are talked about in this poem, is tragic. I just ran into this girl who works at Dunkin' Donuts last night, and I've known her for about 10+ years. She was wearing a pink ribbon, and after a long talk with no one else in the "store", she had worries that she was going to die this year. It took poems this year to help me learn how to connect and empathize with things I took for granted and just thought myself to be stoic in nature. This is a beautiful poem. I think what would enhance it, would be to leave a space above and below the poem to let it stand out, and to remove all the ending punctuations because they don't matter, and about 80% of them are wrong. Without them there, your poem is free of such distraction and stands out as a beautiful lesson/love that ANYONE could appreciate!! Wonderful poem!! Beautiful xAliceChan. xoxo -Mark

[xToxicTrick]

oh thanks so much Mark c: and ill be sure the do what you suggested but thank you so so much xoxo -Allie