Amnesty

Amnesty

A Poem by Trekkie

amnesty;
your half-felt lies [of your broken promise {both the ones you’ve made
and the ones you’ve lost}]
your annoyed half-smile [your regretted almost-jump]
you fail to see;
the meaning of the word;
you know there will be no…
amnesty
for you
[who would be insane enough to offer it?]
your heart thumps; your thoughts bleed
your breath kills; your mind weaves
mercy
unsure what that may be
you
don’t know
where you’re coming from
where you’re supposed to be
(secrets and lies; lies and secrets)
afraid;
alone;
unprotected;
you know there will be no
amnesty
for you.

© 2009 Trekkie


Author's Note

Trekkie
...The brackets baffle me, as they probably do you.

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Great read. I can definitely feel the urgency and anger behind it.

"Your annoyed half-smile [your regretted almost-jump]" was probably my favorite line.

But as you said, the brackets were a little baffling. It kind of broke the flow of the whole thing. Maybe replace them with commas, or make them lines of their own.

Other than that, nice work.

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Great read. I can definitely feel the urgency and anger behind it.

"Your annoyed half-smile [your regretted almost-jump]" was probably my favorite line.

But as you said, the brackets were a little baffling. It kind of broke the flow of the whole thing. Maybe replace them with commas, or make them lines of their own.

Other than that, nice work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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