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Foolish Heart

Foolish Heart

A Poem by Pikachu
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My flaw...

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She said the words “I love you”
You say “I love you too”
Thinking that it will last forever
Loving each other more than ever
Holding one another in a loving embrace
Smiling as you look upon her face
Willing to risk everything you have
Nothing less than being in love
 
Cradling her in your safe arms
Protecting her from any and all harms
Not even caring for yourself anymore
As long as you don’t see her fall to the floor
But as time went by she slowly faded away
The only thing left to do was to sit there and pray
So that she will finally opens her eyes ad ears
To be able to see you see and listen to what she hears
And see you standing alone fighting the cruel world
Through the pouring rain and the ruthless cold
Constantly fighting through the endless pain
Your tears falling heavily as if its searing rain
 
Every hour of everyday, week after enduring week
Barely able to stand feeling so helplessly weak
Broken, battered and on your failing knees
Unmoving, just waiting for that relieving breeze
You know that this is it, the edge of your limit
The agony spreads all over, you just can’t feel it
Over the horizon, you see another problematic fleet
You feel your body tear apart as you get back on your feet
Looking up at the sky, you just see her watching
You see your reflection in the rain, barely living
 
Preparing yourself, getting ready for another fight
Knowing it’s now hopeless, impossible to take flight
You start charging forward, still standing all alone
Trying to yell out loud, but now its just a broken weak tone
Then you take the leap of faith into the invincible fray
Lost and confused, you just keep battering away
Then you feel blow after blow and feel yourself being thrown
To you it felt like you went farther than any bird has flown
And when you hit the ground, the harsh reality is back
No feeling, no care, no compassion its pointless to keep on the attack
Again you lay there in endless, immense pain
Looking up at the clouds feeling the cold never-ending rain
In your misery, you see her walking toward you
Feeling so relieved, and a little happy too
But as she sits down next to you, while you lay there listening
She says the words “I’m sorry goodbye” and you just lost every feeling
 
The worlds destroy the foundations of your very world
And the agonizing pain sears through you ten fold
Soon, your tears are mixing alongside the rain
Even the cruel world is crying alongside your mourning pain
You lay in the mud, feeling the rain take you down
You feeling so numb mot seeing or hearing a sound
She soon gets up and looks in your crying eyes
And you stare back full of sorrow, feeling deceived by lies.
Deep within yourself, you feel yourself being torn apart
Trying to hold on, it felt as if she shot your beating heart
Now you realize that you might have a thoughtless heart
 
Maybe that’s your mistake, exposing your fragile, foolish heart…
Now your just a simple guy, trying to pick up the pieces of a shattered heart…
 
 
 
 
 

© 2010 Pikachu


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Very intense! Well written with a lot of emotion. I like it very much.

Only a couple things that detract from it: the small print, and it is hard to read as one long verse. Perhaps it is just me, but my eyes tend to jump lines and I have to search to find my place. A little larger print and broken into a few verses this would be an awesome poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Love this.. very emotional and well written :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


There is so much pain here. My heart goes out to you. You have some good self expression in this poem and now we know what it feels like to be you with a broken heart. I hope you are feeling better than this now.
my only note is- proofread- there are a few typos. Otherwise, good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


well, I do not know if I can add anything new, but this is a great write. The emotion, the feeling, the ride the reader goes on with you... fantastic. I am very glad you shared this poem and allowed me to read it. Thank you
J

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Wow this is really deep and powerful. I like it I found it over-all very interesting!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I am a girl but I actually went through this with this guy I was with and so I could really feel this guy's pain. I almost cried to be perfectly honest. Keep being amazing!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is an interesting write. It at first reminded me of someone who is loosing their loved on to an illness and the person is loosing the battle but towards the end you could take it yet another way. That she has decided she doesn;t love him anymore and is leaving not dying. Either way this is an amazing painful and descriptive write. the image of the man sitting in the pouring rain is a painful scene. This write is wonderfully done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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this is so painful and sad and heartbreaking - I was with you on every line...wonderful

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Wow, I love this. The pain is shown in every line, it flows really well, the rhyme scheme is great and the description is amazing. A really good write that describes the pain of heartbreak within each word! Absolutely stunning! Thank you for sharing :]



Posted 10 Years Ago


This poem is wonderful, This how I felt after my recent break up. I could feel the emotion the confusion, love, passion, and inevitable end. Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


It's very well written, with exquisite emotions. However, I would like you to reconsider the structure, it kinda distracted me.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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