Watch Me Fall

Days coming and going,

Just to remind me of my sleepless nights,

With thoughts all tangled up,

I’d sacrifice it all,

Just for one more day with you,

Would you pick me up?

Then drop me right back down,

Like you have before?

Is this the way you show your love?

No,

You just overuse the word,

Toss it around,

And bang it against this weak heart of mine,

As if it’s nothing,

Baby,

You have me on a hold,

For you I’d risk it all,

You on the other side wouldn’t,

So now I’m left thinking,

What could have been?

What should have been?

You just like to watch me fall,

Reviews

[Gabriella]

This is good.. I like it lots.

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks:3

[K-mo]

I really like this one

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks.:3

[Dr. Wood ?]

well these are lyrics to a song aren't they?

Get a tunesmith

make a fortune


send me a cheque when you're famous

[Serena Kaye]

Haha, thanks. Ehh, kinda sounds like it.:p

[TheJordBaker]

incredible, great movement to a moving poem!! the isolation of words and everything just works. top stuff :)

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks!

[Han. <3]

Toss it around,

And bang it against this weak heart of mine,


i like that it reminds me off kids kicking some little dead animal around like its nothing.

You should write a peice on how your coping without this person.
Like how good it to be from their grasp but how scary it is to be out at the same time, that would be intresting. (:

[Serena Kaye]

I think I might just do that!(:
Thank you!
Ha, yeah that's what it reminds me of too.

[Rhea752]

this struck a chord. well done. nice flow.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks.

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I like the structure to this. Great job

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[Chloe]

This is really nice and sad. Keep going

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks(:

[Tai Ryens]

It somewhat reminds me of The River by Atmosphere, except this is what I assume to be about love. I enjoyed this, especially the start of it.

[Serena Kaye]

I just might have to look that up.
Thanks Ryan..

[kublakhan27]

This has a real nice flow to it, almost song-like...and the first two lines are awesome :)

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)