Sweet-full Bliss

Am I stuck again.?

Blood flowing,

Slow beating,

Mind bobbing,

Meandering thoughts,

Is it true?

Is it worth the risk?

Try and get knocked down?

All the things I seem to wonder,

When I think of you,

With a twisting heart,

Trembling body,

Terrified eyes,

Could I do this?

Could you do that?

Or is this another wicked twist?

Or could this be,

A sweet full bliss,

Author's Note

It kinda faded towards then end..
My bad./:

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

Okay, so it confused me a little which means the clarity is questionable.
I think the fact that it fades adds to your poem, as if the exherstion of the emotions has tired the protagonist out, it makes your word seem more real and vivd.
Nice piece of work.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks.:3

[K-mo]

I like it, and the end is just fine to me! I love how good a writer you are, it inspires me:)

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[K-mo]

your welcome!

[xtheeverproject]

I like the strength of the words. Some people try to describe themselves too lightly, and end up being really flat. It's a lot to take in, but I kind of like the chaotic feel. It works.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thank you.

[Persephone]

I adore this - it so resembles how love is - confusing to no end - thanks for sharing :)

[Serena Kaye]

Yes indeed.
You're welcomes!

[Serena Kaye]

&' thanks as well. xD

[TheJordBaker]

it did maybe fade towards the end but I stuck with you all the way. powerful and provocative as always :) and as always it spoke to me personally. nice work.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thank you!

[realmwriter]

I followed the piece very easly. But then I live with anguish in my daily life. So I knew where it was going. The fade out at the end works very well for the enirity of the piece. I wouldn't change it at all. Well done...!

[Serena Kaye]

Well thank you!^~^

[Anthony Q Armstrong]

I truly liked the end the most. If it faded to you, then that's how you see it. I think it is a very challenging thing to deal with, all the depression and loneliness. I know how you feel. But it was a GREAT write. Love all your work, keep it up.

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think it kept on strong enough...It isn't your best but it aint bad...So says I..what do I know?

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks.

[Tai Ryens]

It did fade towards the end, but this seems the exact type of poetry meant to fade. As if you are facing the aftermath and fallout of whatever had happened before. Lovely poem~

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks.