I can't stand loving you anymore

You tore my heart out

Should I smile cause we're friends,

Or cry cause I know,

That's all we'll ever be,

You know what you're doing to me,

Making me hate myself,

For loving you.

 

I can't stand loving you anymore,

I'm ashamed that I do,

My friends all say you are leading me on,

I know that,

I know it full well,

Yet I can't seem to get over you.

 

It's been over a year,

Since I opened my heart,

I thought you would be there,

Feeling my heart with your love,

I just want your love,

To hold hands with you,

To feel your lips on mine.

 

I'm angry at myself,

I'm angry at you.

Reviews

[Cody Wiggins]

Wow ill comment as soon as i can see the screen through the tears

[Steve]

Very well done......I like how you organize things and the end comes together nicely.

[Kasey Klein]

My thoughts are this:

I think this would read better as prose instead of prose with lines chopped up to make it look like poetry. I know-I know, what makes a poem is subjective and all that.

However, you write this heartfelt plea as if to someone. I suggest you write it like that: a note to someone, maybe a soliloquy to the stars.

Just my opinion.

[Nancy S.]

Poignant, to the bone with the raw honest emotion of your narrator. Beautiful poetic in the contemplation of self esteem and the role it plays with Eros.