Love At First Sight

A stranger that stirred my heart.

You're a stranger on the street,

You asked me out for a drink,

My heart skipped a beat,

Your eyes were wonderful,

But I didn't know you,

I lied and said I have a boyfriend.

You then asked me,

If we can be friends,

I teased and said maybe,

You wanted my number,

I didn't give it to you,

The worst decision I have made.

Your on my mind now,

A stranger who's name I don't know,

Your hansom face,

Your deep soothing voice,

I hope I can see you again,

So we can be friends,

You've enchanted me,

So quickly yet so effectavly.

I regret not getting to know you,

I guess this was love at first sight.

Reviews

[Unknown]

I like this poem, it places reality onto the page. I would say to improve this, or any other of your future poems; try to experiment in some more imagery to illuminate feelings, and use try different forms and metre to create a flow to match your mood.
:)

[Member Now Left]

Wow! Does that bring back memories or what?!!
Love it!

[D.R. Wilsey Jr.]

I understand the feelings you're trying to express here, but the words you chose to do so with come out a tad shallow. I don't feel "love at first sight". I only feel a bit of attraction. Always read over your work before publishing it too. I know there are always bound to be a few minor mistakes that you can fix after the fact, but you made some simple mistakes. Third stanza. "Your" should be "you're". "Hansom" should be spelled "handsome". Also, handsome is a bit overused (and hansom is a two-wheeled carriage). Try to explore new adjectives. One word can make a difference in the impact of your writing.

"Effectavly" should be "effectively".

Writing about love comes easier with age after you've dealt with true heartbreak, learned the difference between lust and love, etc.

However, just know that you can only improve your writing from here.

[Y.Badr El Din]

yeps, really gd job- remind me wen i was sort of in dis situation, but i sore that person and now we are friends. wow really amazing that u captured a moment like that. something that is close to every ones heart, well mine anyway.

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I regret not getting to know you,
I guess this was love at first sight.

These words here just summed up everything so well.
Your feelings are out there and well said. This is a very
well written write. Your words just flow. Like reading this.