A Glass of Water

true or not? reveiw and msg you the answer...

You cut me

with your voice

with your words

with your knife!

All you had was

a simple request.

Get you a glass of water.

That was it.

I should have listened,

just done it.

But than you threw insults.

I just ignored them.

I figured you were in a bad mood.

I just didn't realise how bad.

Then you went into the kitchen,

to get your water, I thought

but then you came out with a knife.

You said you'd make me listen.

You were over me suddenly

with looks to kill.

You held the knife at my throat.

I was crying;

you licked the tears off my face

And said with a smile, 

"There is the water I asked for."

Author's Note

guess if it is a true story or not and i'll send you and answer in reply...

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I'm hoping it's not but with society now a days I wouldn't know quite what to guess... I know of many women who have had these events happen.

This was really good, I think that it needs alittle more of a flow to it. I like the ending with the tears, it was very cleaver. It read more like a story and not a poem, all you need to do is add some rhythm/flow to it. This was a good start. Great Job!

[Angel Baby]

Very detailed.... could use a little more flow, but the overall write is fantastic. Very intriguing and interesting. I really enjoyed it. Thanks, for sharing. PW

[jumbie's #1 fan]

this is good sho and true...i think maybe...a little over exaggerated

[Wolfwind Words]

Hmmm... That's a toughy... I take a stab at it (No pun intended :) )

Id say that with the world the way it is and all the fantastic improbably things that really do seem to happen. I'd go with a, yes, it just might have happened.

The poem was poignient to say the least. Caught my mind up in it, and thought of a very sadistic friend I once knew.

Well Writen.
Aaron Maycroft

[poetforlife]

Very intriguing and interesting. I love the hook at the very end about the tears being the water. That was very clever. Detailed thought process. Good write.

[QuietPoet]

I hope to God this isnt true...