Shooting Star

My second poem that kind of depicts me or anyone else who wants to make something out of themselves. I couldn't resist to do another poem. It was on my mind to do so all day lol :) Enjoy

As I look up under this starry sky

My heart springs as the sparkle flows by

I make this wish writing on the tablet of my being

This just brings me to the part to let out my feelings

The sky rises and falls on this fateful night

With one chance I clasp at the sprinkling sight

So it comes to say I'm going to become like a star

And fill the whole world with bedazzlement and puzzlement

They now realize my inspiration from the horizon 

Under this midnight hour I plan to live a legacy in the stars above

Never to say that it's not enough 

Because my dreams is everlasting

Because I plan to make it a reality 

And my intentions emblazon ever so gently 

Like the stars that's blanketing the earth 

I realize, like everyone there's a star in us

Imparted in us ever since birth 

Now watch as I shine from the firmament

You too can illuminate as I can 

But some of us push the stars away from us 

That holds the keys to unlock our journey

And so I ask, "Where's your star?" 

  

 

Author's Note

I think this poem is pretty good for it came from my heart. Despite my mistakes I realize this is just a start. So far my second poem and with many more....

Reviews

[Aethereal]

You beautifully express so much of what goes on in our minds as we sit under the glory of the evening sky: Your first verse inspired me to write the following tiny poem which you may keep as your own:

Wish

Underneath the starry sky
watching meteors flash by,
I made a wish
deep inside
where my feelings
all abide.

[Jack...]

I liked it but I am curious why the first verse and first two lines of the second verse rhymed but then it ended? For your second poem it was great. Keep working, you have a definite gift.

[Alexander Rodgers]

I think this was very well written, great job, and the last line is touching and powerful.

[Ravyne Hawke]

Lovely poem, very endearing with great imagery. Curious, you began writing in a rhyming scheme then stopped. It is a little distracting for me. I know this was written from your heart, but you may want to think if you want this to be a rhyming poem or a free verse if you should decide to rework this at all.

[Jessica Gillitzer]

i love it. it has such beauty. i see you have a star, i shall need one as well. this is very emotional and i like the idea of living in the legacy of the stars above, this was a very magical line I thought. i think the line in this is wrong "dreams is eternal" typo maybe dear. i hope your well. Keep up the heart felt writing.
< 3 Jessie

[Riley Bray]

You truly have a gift William! This was a wondeful poem with no spelling or grammar mistakes nor flow mishaps. Very well done!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Great write, you have a gift that can dragged the reader in non stopping reading in your work. Good idea of stars. This is stunning write keep writing.

[William C Jones III]

Thanks for the encouragement. And I'll keep on writing because there are ideas that fill my head. Mysterious urges to write poems has never been this enchanting for me.....