"Inbetween"

"Inbetween"

 

        Love...

Flows like a

        River.

Beginning in...

        Obscurity,

Ending in...

       A mad rush

to the sea;

       And inbetween...

Lies...

       Heaven...

Valentine

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

Short, but still one heck of a nice little poem. A good writer should always be able to good material that's short and good material that's long, and you easily do both. :)

[Valentine]

I just am a person that is trying to write. Kathie

[Lyn Anderson]

What I like about this is it could be straight up, but it also could mean something entirely different. Very well done with few words.

[Valentine]

Are you talking about the way the lines are posted or something else? The lines are that way to signify the movement of the water. Valentine

[Lyn Anderson]

I am specifically talking about word usage. The way you've chosen the words, this could be a wonderful soft romantic piece, or there could be a different edge to it.

[Valentine]

All I see is soft and romantic. Kathie

[Lyn Anderson]

I think my second interpretation is similar to Jacob's.

[Valentine]

Lie as lie down....not lie like not tell the truth. Kathie

[Lyn Anderson]

I understand. It is not intended to offend to point out dual interpretations. It is an effective tool. If it is important to you, to clarify, then I would suggest adding a note to your poem. Pardon me for any unintentional toe stepping.

[Valentine]

I will never understand how a " lie" can take you to Heaven! Kathie

[Jamestown]

Beautiful piece, thanks for sharing.

[Valentine]

You are very welcome. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this...like two poems in one...the mad rush of love, but also the mad rush of lies that can keep us from getting there.

[Valentine]

I do not know about the lies, but thank you for reading this. Kathie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that's just me almost always seeing double meanings---reading "lies" two ways...i'm a little bit off you know...

[Valentine]

Are you really??? Laughing...Kathie

[R Smith]

had to save this for my library, an absolutely stunning poem and oh that heaven can be so magic while it lasts, thank you Kathie :)

[Valentine]

Thank you Richard. Kathie

[Sami Khalil]

Wisdom flows from your pen. It is indeed. Excellent...:)........

[Valentine]

Not so much wisdom...just thoughts. Kathie

[Sami Khalil]

Ok. You are welcome...:).....

[Lizardo]

Ah such beautiful words of wisdom...
This is probably my favorite poem from you, it's short but you get the message
Great poem!

[Valentine]

Thank you very much for your kind words. Kathie

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!

[PhantomDancer]

Short and sweet! Effective and nice visual layout.