In the beginning you need to change the verb tense. It should read:
"You said you loved me,
You wanted to be with me
You cared about me."
because you then write:
" And I believed it all."
Then after the line
" You lied to me.
You left me
and moved on to someone else."
"Now the secret is out,
I've given you back everything,
except my trust,
trust you do not deserve.
I will not let you take me down;
for you are not worth it.
So tonight I shout good bye
beneath the stars,
and move on.
In the beginning you need to change the verb tense. It should read:
"You said you loved me,
You wanted to be with me
You cared about me."
because you then write:
" And I believed it all."
Then after the line
" You lied to me.
You left me
and moved on to someone else."
"Now the secret is out,
I've given you back everything,
except my trust,
trust you do not deserve.
I will not let you take me down;
for you are not worth it.
So tonight I shout good bye
beneath the stars,
and move on.
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