Broken Poetry

I'm drowning in a sea
of my own despair

I'll stay silent
as you kill
me slowly

I'm losing the struggle
as I try my hardest
to swim to the top
of this poem

Clawing my way back
hanging onto every word

Digging my nails
into the flesh of poetry
to overcome your
careless actions

Please just
let me swallow
my last breath
and hold it in
forever

He broke me
I could feel the love

S
  L
     I
        P
       
         R
        I
        G
        H
                              Through my fingers

Sadness plagued me
devastation crushed my heart

As my mind spun in circles
I could feel my words
lose their force

It never occurred to me
how delicate I truly was
until I was robbed
of my pure heart
and impression of him

He stole it right out of my chest
deprived me of its steady pounding rhythm
replaced it with a broken heart-ed beat

Transplanting me into
the unforgiven realm unfaithful men
where my reflections are hollow
but this poem has shadows

Draping their blinding veil
upon my eyes

I felt my body structure rust
as I crumbled into nothing
but broken poetry



By Samantha Pruitt

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Astounding piece, Samantha, what truly amazes me is your referral to the poem as a time frame, in which the beginning is just the start of deterioration and your speaker completely loses themself in the ending. Wanting to return to the start of the poem actualizes your speaker in so many ways, and it's beautiful.
You write of the fall so poignantly, spectacular write!

[Madalyn Beck]

Beautiful, my dear. I truly admired this piece. You have created a heartbreaking image through your words and the sadness is powerful. My favorite lines are below. Great job! (:

"It never occurred to me
how delicate I truly was
until I was robbed
of my pure heart
and impression of him"

[Lyn Anderson]

This is amazing as always. I love this poem. And girlie, you owe me some reviews LOL, just like your hubby.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol I will get on that as soon as I can and much thanks

[wordman]

lots of imagery and emotions and disbelief of those emotions

[maria ( rose)]

WOW! Draping their blinding veil
upon my eyes

I felt my body structure rust
as I crumbled into nothing
but broken poetry...Extraordinary write! The poem really locks you in. Well Done! Thanks for the share.
Maria rose

[Michael Stevens]

A powerful glimpse into something personal!

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad and powerful emotional ride in the poem. Love and relationship can take us to many places. Sad part we forget what made us go wild with passing of time. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Leanna King]

Beautiful poem and very emotion filled!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

This...my dear beautiful poetess...is AMAZING...sorry for the caps but I can not properly express my deep connection to this poem...your talent displayed in this piece is so abounding that the sentiments reverberated in my soul, causing me to break my silent stroll through poetry today..... your words shatter in into a million shards of cutting blades right through a wreaked heart. Your introspection is brilliantly expressed here...

"It never occurred to me
how delicate I truly was
until I was robbed
of my pure heart
and impression of him"

And the image of your love slipping slowly through your fingers was so heartbreakingly sorrowful...yet such a gorgeous emotional image...wow, this is an absolutely heartfelt favorite of mine... I need a new library that says...ADORED!!!

[New Theory]

Beautiful poem, awesome words used and a very beautifully written.

[Nicholas Hagenschneider]

I have a poem that starts out "I fall into a pit of despair, drowning on my own" Haha