I Wait

A poem inspired by Set Me Free, Casting Crowns. My first poem ever and one of my best.

Pain and betrayal at the fireside

Memories of grief and shame

Desperation this place provides

As a man was beaten lame

 

The c**k crowed and the savior died

The symbol set in stone

Of betrayal at the fireside

And no time to atone

 

After death the Savior rose

Than retuned once and twice

But the betrayal in the charcoals

Was fixed in the thrice

 

A lost trip for fish at sea

Was on its way home

The savior stood at the shore

Past sins were atoned

Reviews

[A. Amos]

But to be a writer
is to be a masochist
and I refuse to get off
on the pain anymore

You poetry is full of meaning and I sure will follow your work.. good read

[deeps]

Wonderful rhyme scheme and flow.
Very well written write.

[Anu]

I like the flow of this piece.

[J_Lynn]

I first want to Thank You for your review. You definitely have some talent and definitely put me to shame. Keep working hard and doing what you love and I hope to see more in the future!

[Darren Lynn]

This is extraordinarily good. You have grasped the humanity of the pain without falling for the religiosity that so often steels the message.