Nature 1

Nature 1

A Poem by Wannabewriter16
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About relaxing and being at peace with my love

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The beauty of summer surrounds us
Wind blows across our bodies
As the green grass and dirt burns under our toes
The sun beating upon us
The world moves slowly
As nature gives us our fill
Of peaceful days with one another
If only like this it could stay

© 2018 Wannabewriter16


Author's Note

Wannabewriter16
What do you think of the dialogue? Also the picture is by me as well. Please let me know what you honestly think of the writing and the picture.

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i love the picture ... it brings the eye to the bird instantly ..and the starkness of the full sky in contrast to all the activity of bird and branch throws me off balance for a bit ....but it reminds me the bird is also of the sky ...but you took quite a chance taking the pic under the bird like that ;)))
you poem puts me there .. moments in nature and the "now" are wondrous ...not to be held and kept ...but to be experienced forever as our moments change ... easy smooth read .. nothing i would change .. opening line sparks my mind ... i feel the wind ... the warm sun ... and the best of it for me is the focus on sharing it with another person ... in peace and comfort
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wannabewriter16

3 Years Ago

Thank you I'm so happy you like it. I was actually away from the bird aways but zoomed in to get a b.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ahahah a good thing! ;)



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Wannabe - I hate to be critical, but non-the-less here goes:
The beauty of summer surrounds us.
Wind blows across our bodies
green grass and dirt burns beneath our toes
Sun beating down on us
world moves slowly, nature gives us our fill.
Peaceful days with one another.
If only it could stay like this.

Nice as the picture is - I see no relationship between
it and your lovely poem.

Please don't be mad with me - Dave

Posted 2 Years Ago


you painted a lovely image of a summers day,a breeze blowing across your body

Posted 3 Years Ago


i love the picture ... it brings the eye to the bird instantly ..and the starkness of the full sky in contrast to all the activity of bird and branch throws me off balance for a bit ....but it reminds me the bird is also of the sky ...but you took quite a chance taking the pic under the bird like that ;)))
you poem puts me there .. moments in nature and the "now" are wondrous ...not to be held and kept ...but to be experienced forever as our moments change ... easy smooth read .. nothing i would change .. opening line sparks my mind ... i feel the wind ... the warm sun ... and the best of it for me is the focus on sharing it with another person ... in peace and comfort
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wannabewriter16

3 Years Ago

Thank you I'm so happy you like it. I was actually away from the bird aways but zoomed in to get a b.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ahahah a good thing! ;)

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Added on July 11, 2018
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