Under The Moonlit Night

A lonely maiden moans under the moonlit sky

gathering her tears in a regretful goodbye

God alone knows why she cannot smile

Why these fearful eyes shall never shine

 

Trees encompass her in a vindictive malice

Fruits all turn to bone and roses to ice

The air is poisoned by silenced laughter

The wind sighs here on after....forever

 

Her breasts are full but inside, her heart is hollow

Her lungs may breathe but the breath is shallow

These vines have grown to stifle her dreams

Of liberation from the nightmares she sees

 

Fleeting feelings fracture the remnants of her soul

Now she must travel along the narrow winding road

Where all must walk alone never to return

To the gate that holds mysteries forever to be unknown 

Author's Note

well yeah...just be honest thats all I can ask

Reviews

[BlueDreams]

It was a non stop creative piece of write .. A great write :-)

[Kim's Poems]

I really enjoyed this write,
intriguing and inspiring really.
Nicely written and said.

[Jay G.]

I read it. .... Twice.
Well balanced, well written.
Is the maiden walking to the end of her mortality, and if she is why? I really enjoy poems (or prose) that are descriptive, yet leave me searching for other meaning(s).
Thanks for sharing. - JG

[Jeremy Baker]

Great technique and style - fantastic writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the way you used the language. Create a good vision. The description made the story come alive.
"Her breasts are full but inside, her heart is hollow
Her lungs may breathe but the breath is shallow"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sarah Hobbit]

I like the way you paint a picture with this poem. this is so sad. but well writen.
Good job
Sarah

[smalltownsympathies]

The way you piece your sentences together is just lovely
i just think you should move away from the rhyme/half-rhyme scheme that you've got goin on, I think you're a better writer than that.
Best of luck!

[Marie Harrison]

These trees of malice are leading her down the wrong road. What a moving poem. So many truths in this poem. Nice job!