Rough Shock Absurdities

Being blown overboard by tortured love

Rough Shock Absurdities

 

dying inside the embrace

of sweet and delicate arachnid malaise

while nuptial blackmail is clenching this heart

that's bursting like a balloon.

 

Limitless audacity has run to fumes

and the sight of her is a blistering monochrome nightmare.

Been trying to pillow-slam it away, every day,

like a babe who thought there was only womb.

And I'm still just an abstract manslaughter

roaming down youth's bright-soda-turf,

while on the asphalt, my guts have all been spewed

by dimpled machineguns running,

and I'm still dreaming of dazzling release

on life's arid cinder cusp,

praying for exotic grace.

 

11-3-08

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is phenomenal...your brilliant use of metaphor..."I'm still just an abstract manslaughter"
and the personification..."dimpled machineguns running"---
Even though tortured love is behind this, there are other interpretations that could be gathered..I am also thinking of current events, and how this absolutely fits into this as well.
I sure hope we can find that "exotic grace."
j.

[WasteDragon]

amen, brother. Thank you, yeah, this is one of which I'm very proud.

[Chris Shaw]

A great write and your use of metaphors is to die for. Felt the torture here.

by dimpled machine guns running -
how good that is.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

never stop looking my friend! the more you look, the more you see it... everywhere! If i could go back in time I would find the young me and rub my face into it, I would get a funnel and pour it down my throat! I spent way to much time in the angry lament phase to busy looking for reasons to be pissed off and externalizing my own preconceived roles i put in motion:( meanwhile back at the ranch all around me was a thousand bits of sublime waiting to be picked up... I missing the juice!

[WasteDragon]

poetry does have a way of releasing emotions, and keeping them healthy and beautiful, yes. Hey, thanks, mate.

[Ana Papaya]

I like it!

[Dave Brown]

as you well describe, tortured love does have its unfortunate moments