The Maze of Your Ghost

I'm disappearing...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Maze of Your Ghost

 

 

 

You're unbelievably good at

avoiding my pleading gaze

 

And the louder I scream

the faster I fade into haze

 

You say you don't hate me

but I know if I were an enemy

It would kill me more gently..

 

Atleast, I would exist in your pitch black eyes

 

My tears will be no longer a captive

of waiting for your forgivness

That I have decided.

 

I'll pretend I never knew you

I'll pretend I didn't break anything

or wrestle the pounding pain within

 

I'll walk through you too

even though, everytime I try to

I end up in a maze

of remembering your everyday smile

 

I try to rinse your scent off my skin

and I curse the morning I wake up

with the portrait of you in my head

 

I will forget you.

I will forget you.

I HAVE to forget you.

and you will vanish leaving

my misused smile in peace

 

But first...I need some sleep

and a new untainted dream

in which your memories decease ..

Author's Note

Comments and reviews are appreciated.

*Image title: Sleeping Ocean

*by `Princess-of-Shadows

*Link: http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=sleeping+ocean#/d2losbi

Reviews

[Tala]

It really made you feel what the person was feeling, some of the line in this were amazing, "and you will vanish leaving my misused smile in peace"
my favourite part was probably the last paragraph bit.

[Buddhistboy73]

Ok, so this poem's flow is broken up by the lack of capitals on some lines, but apart from that, I really liked it. You do a good job of conjuring up imagery here...and the last stanza is an absolute killer! It's like you raised your game 100% just for the last stanza....well done...:)

[luciddreamer]

You have put letting go of someone is such an artistic manner that the pain turns to beauty....well written :)

[OR]

My Fav. :
"but I know if I were an enemy
It would kill me more gently.."
I love this piece but I think you should change this line :"of remembering your everyday smile"
My best wishes for a creative and poetic life !
Peace

[Mauricio Montoya]

I’ve always said poetry is an art and here you’ve displayed that. Excellent write.

[Blossom]

love the piece and poem. they both are so beautiful.

[tshigg]

Good piece.

[AreWeBothCrazy]

This was very nice, I loved the emotion behind it which you conveyed excellently with your words. well done and keep it up! :)

Great Poem!! Wonderful work! I think I can relate to this poem a lot. It really is hard to let someone you love go. :) Well expressed!

[Misty Blue Eyes]

i really love this and its so hard to let some one go that you love so much.. the poem is outstanding