Amazingly beautiful work here. Great imagery of the blue eyes. The stanzas flow wonderfully. One of my favourite lines has to be "of luminosity and gloom, 'I will always love you." Simply beautiful.
The ending is superbly written too. The way youdescribe it enchants the reader. "The blazing desire." Simply beautiful. Well done. Simply Well done.
Amazingly beautiful work here. Great imagery of the blue eyes. The stanzas flow wonderfully. One of my favourite lines has to be "of luminosity and gloom, 'I will always love you." Simply beautiful.
The ending is superbly written too. The way youdescribe it enchants the reader. "The blazing desire." Simply beautiful. Well done. Simply Well done.
I am so touched by this, it flows so beautifully, and the imagery is just hypnotic.
The last stanza is particularly beautiful- "And now, the words have been bled... The blazing desire to love and roam free, glistens in the depraved darkness within me" That makes me shiver.
I like the way the pencil expressed the deep-felt emotion and the sense of longing for what cannot be in the now... Good images, especially of the colours, that support the emotional intensity, underpinned by some nice alliterative phrases.. a romantic tour de force!
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