Somewhere between heaven and twilight (A collaboration with Kalypso)

Somewhere between heaven and twilight (A collaboration with Kalypso)

A Poem by willweb

High within the illuminated sky,

a silver midnight sun....

it seemed like a darker day

found a brighter night,

somewhere between heaven and twilight

 

Majestic oaks in silhouette

and shadows paint the earth,

alive within lemonade shimmers

a' glow of promised beauty,

as the stars sleep...dreaming

 

© 2014 willweb


Author's Note

willweb
Thank you Kalypso for allowing me to post this poem.

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The phrase "lemonade shimmers" is as original as they come. Love how you have captured a single moment with words so refined and stunning. Iam still not over lovely phrase. It probably would remain etched in my mind forever.:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend. Kalypso inspired this poem during the recent full moon. I am happy you .. read more
This poem captures a perfect moment. Sometimes I look at the sky and I wish I could take what I see and keep it the way it is forever. This poem does that. It's lovely. My only suggestion would be to alter the end from "...dreaming" to "...and dream." It would make a neater end.

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jessica. I like your suggestion. We had fun writing this...I know what you mean ab.. read more
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This poem expresses an enduring image. Dressed in silver garments studded with “lemonade” beams, Selene emulates Apollo’s daytime glory.

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Kalypso brought the silver into this and that set the mood for the piece. Thanks so much for your ni.. read more
You have created some lovely images for the reader to enjoy. A seamless collaboration. Absolutely stunning

:) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Julie for your nice words tonight. Kalypso's feelings about the moon inspired this.. read more
Aww you two this is so beautiful.You write so well together :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ghost of Jupiter

9 Years Ago

Thank you Vidya, it is so sweet of you to read and leave your thoughts. A complete spontaneous write.. read more
willweb

9 Years Ago

Kalypso is an awesome poet to write with. She inspired this poem and I just added a little to it. T.. read more
Vidya Bacchus

9 Years Ago

You are both very welcome and it was a pleasure to read your work :)
Very visual in terms of symbolism and imagery. I feel the the poems where i can visualize the scent and smell of the situations are the best poems due to actually picturing ones self being there in the moment when reading. Badass read :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ghost of Jupiter

9 Years Ago

hahaha, thank you Cahjli, you are badass for reading, my friend. This is all Will's creative genius .. read more
willweb

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much for your nice comments tonight. I am happy you enjoyed our poem.
Cahjli Symes

9 Years Ago

anytime :)
"...alive within lemonade shimmers..." Nice imagery! This is a beautiful and seamless collaboration!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ghost of Jupiter

9 Years Ago

Isn't that the best line? Will's images he crafts are beautiful. Thank for reading Rita, so apprecia.. read more
willweb

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting on our poem Rita. Kalypso is a fantastic poet to work with. I a.. read more
Good write, and i wish i was the one to write lemonade shimmers.

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend. Glad you liked our poem. Kalypso is a fantastic poet.
Ghost of Jupiter

9 Years Ago

I know, Will creates the most beautiful images, my favorite line too. Thank you so much for stopping.. read more
Wow, this poem is really good. I like it, nicely written. :-)

Kaze~

Posted 9 Years Ago


willweb

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kaze. Kalypso's beautiful phrases were the inspiration for this little poem.
Ghost of Jupiter

9 Years Ago

Thank you Kaze, Will is being to kind he is the true mastermind behind this write, with out his crea.. read more
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

9 Years Ago

Your both very welcome. :-) :-D

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