Journey

short sweet & to the point

Journey in

Sit for a spell

 

I’ll read your mind

On those secrets you’ll never tell

 

Journey out

Go for a ride

 

I’ve told not a soul

What I found inside

 

Journey here

To be with me

 

No other can give you

All levels of ecstasy

 

Journey there

Lo and behold

 

We’re not with you

You have no one to hold

 

Reviews

[Rachel DeHart]

I like the word play in this bit
"Journey in

Sit for a spell



I'll read your mind

On those secrets you'll never tell"

The idea of casting a "spell" on someone to read their mind just stood out to me, though I am not sure if thats what you meant, thats how I read it. :] A great show of well thought out lines.

[Michael X]

this has a great subtle rhyme scheme,the decisive wording plays well in essence. Nicely done.

[Mark Pearce]

I like the "journey in" and "journey out" motif. It teases but does not tell.

[Doug]

i like it. the last two stanzas hit me as a warning against journeying "there." very nice. check out my feature!