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She's an inch away from death

No second thoughts

 

No hesitation

The note she wrote sat on the desk

 

Her dads favorite song was playing

She wants to leave

 

Float up into the sky,

To sit on a star.

 

Not as far as mars

But high enough

 

So no one can bug her

And her dad can finally hug her.

© 2010


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You give the illusion in the beginning that her dad is still alive, then reveal in the end that he's actually in heaven (or the sky, or whatever you'd like to call it), which also explains why she wants to die. Interesting piece, the words unfolded very well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This is a very sweet poem- sad to me. But, good job~

Posted 8 Years Ago


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For a short poem, reveals a lot of information. Strong feelings and a yearning desire to feel loved again by a dearly missed father as remembrances of him surround the writer. Great job---

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I really like the emotion in this

Posted 8 Years Ago


You give the illusion in the beginning that her dad is still alive, then reveal in the end that he's actually in heaven (or the sky, or whatever you'd like to call it), which also explains why she wants to die. Interesting piece, the words unfolded very well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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