~Under the Spell

~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

~Under the Spell

 

 In that night;

 

I couldn’t  see anything,

But only feel the

The wet casings of

Dense molecules,

Formed into an emulsion

And this compactness all around me;

 

In that day after;

 

I dwelled on the surface of

Nothing, between salt, and

Sea life I was;

I heard turbid noises,

Far away an intoxication of modernity

I was one, but only one with the mass...

 

In the next minute;

 

The silent slice of life

Moved through my being,

The suffocating glamour

Of a kiss mouth to mouth;

Danced within this white hole

Of memory; for now,

I awoke on land

 

In the next day;

 

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,

Delightfully graced with my second life;

This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The light in your eyes; “overexposed”

But the warm arm around your neck

And the smell of ozon…

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free,
With love,

Eli,
xx

Thank you!

Reviews

[David Scott]

Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)

One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.

Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, thanks for helping me out, I so appreciate it, also what you did for my friend Sugar Plum ♥ for we Euro women need some help anyhow in this big English world... :) Thank you dearly for all you do, and you know, did read your latest already 5 times ;) but I need time to review.... for I like that one!

[David Scott]

Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of great and pure truths. I'm glad I do not offend.

You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either make me moody. For I'm not often moody :) so glad to have you by! Nia Nour, a.k.a. Sugar Plum, is fantastic, I read her since I'm almost on here, and she brings you to other worlds... one of my favs :) for sure as you are too!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

simply thrilling! I`m so impressed from this poem of darkness, even it`s not horrible, but it`s real and ghostly, showing the true essence inside us.. trying to capture the world beyond reality of visible things..very nice flowing, the voice of the soul is so touching and haunting. My favorite is the last verses, I always imagined that i`ll fly!

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,
Delightfully graced with my second life;
This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The warm arm is it of guardian angel?

-nour-
June-013

Thank you dear, yes: "rying to capture the world beyond reality of visible things.." you're seeing it so well... happy with your review my sweet friend x

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,
delightfully graced with my second life-- such beautiful lines. Amazing indeed...

I love the feel of this piece. There is saddness, but there is also hope and the rising of the pheonix above the ashes; the formation of something new and exciting. I too feel this right now, feel these words. You are a true talent, my friend.

Thank you dearly Sarah, I'm pleased you see so much in my writing... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like you make such wonderful allegory...tell one story, and hidden between the lines another wonderful story of evolving in life and love..."the light in your eyes, overexposed"

almost warns of this fantasy that could be covering up bad intentions....but i don't want to take negative away from this piece, so i will consider...second life...as something like a baptism into a calm and peaceful existence...on land.

your words, beautiful as always.

jacob

Ah jacob thank you so much, yes, I understand what you mean... in all, but I can tell you honestly, if you read more of my older pieces too, it's all about an almost death experience.
To be an open book... not to evoke wrong, I have seen a light, and from the other side, I am blessed to write. I'm so grateful to have you here, for you're the one and only who let me think twice about my writes, thank you dearly my friend. :) happy face here!

[KeeD]

Wow, wow, wow, I love a poem that can tell a story, I know cause I try so hard to be that kind of poet.
This is just like an awakening, I'm seeing the process of evolution in such a mystical way.. and it's frankly quiet beautiful and haunting at the same time. I love it to pieces.. I cannot believe i've missed out on reading your work, this is amazing.
Your choice in music is perfect, it gives the poem so much more depth and celestial feel.

I've come back to read this again, this is incredible.

*I'm all red face now* thank you so much Keegan! it's such a pleasure to have a good poet like yourself by, for I've always read you ;-) great, thank you deeply.

[Traci]

Such a magical world you have created here with your vivid imagination. And the music just takes me away on a journey, again able to feel the captivating words as I visualize everything perfectly. You have a true gift my friend, and I never get tired of reading your wonderful work. Another favorite!! So nice to have you back :)

Thank you dearly Traci, for this one was the one of the sea, I told you about ;) so glad you enjoyed it. I can't wait to, well you know :) so good to read you too again my dearest xx

[Traci]

Always my pleasure. And the sea, you know my thoughts already :)

[Frieda P]

I felt as though this one floated from within the womb, so wonderfully safe and mesmerizing, this is a masterpiece my love....so affecting, a dance, a rebirth on the page!! I can't say enough my sweet friend, a million over a hundred, I felt this one to my core...sigh. Magnifico!!

Aw, so glad you enjoyed it, for it was exactly the way I thought while writing this one.... the feeling of a rebirth. Grazie cara, Ti amo! x

[Frieda P]

Astounding write really Eli, I"m still affected by it, and that music is haunting...brava my sweet friend Ti amo & Back tanto! xo

[s y e]

I am so sorry I haven't been on your page for a while. I will try and catch up on your writes. I'm finishing my night by reading this write of yours and I am so glad I did.

This is magnificent. Everytime I read you, you take me on this wonderful journey. All your writes are so vivid that it's like a little image is playing on my screen, I love it. It was perfect, written superbly.

Well done!

~ Noodle.

My sweetheart, thank you so very much, for being with me on this one, hey love don't rush, I know you're having a thousand thingy's in your world, for I'm so grateful for tonight... I shall soon come by more too, for I'm slow... and i can't wait, for I adore your work! :) hugs, and be well noodle sis :)xx

[s y e]

I'll read more tomorrow, promise. Take your time, my writes aren't going anywhere. :-) I love your works, too! Keep well, hugs xox

Oh yes, they do! for I've read them already ;-) loved the Dad piece. Will reply tomorrow with all my love, and effort for you, for you deserve it. xo miss you!

[s y e]

You're such a gem! Miss you, too xo

[Lover Of Words]

Oh my im speechless.... the music goes with this magnificently..... oh girl stops me in my tracks spectacular....

Kels, thank you hun, for I so appreciate your visit xx :) one love!

[Lover Of Words]

I am so honored to read your words

[PurpleQuartz]

Hello again Elisa! What an enchanting poem! It held a mystical and haunting feel about it that was very captivating.

My dear, so good to see you thank you ! :) I am catching up slow-slowly hehe, so good to see you again dear! hope all is well. Thanks for your review, you are a treasure.