~Under the Spell

~Under the Spell, E.L. Elisa Laura, Fantasy, Water signs, Sea, Ocean, Nympf, Death, Live, Life Salt

~Under the Spell

 

 In that night;

 

I couldn’t  see anything,

But only feel the

The wet casings of

Dense molecules,

Formed into an emulsion

And this compactness all around me;

 

In that day after;

 

I dwelled on the surface of

Nothing, between salt, and

Sea life I was;

I heard turbid noises,

Far away an intoxication of modernity

I was one, but only one with the mass...

 

In the next minute;

 

The silent slice of life

Moved through my being,

The suffocating glamour

Of a kiss mouth to mouth;

Danced within this white hole

Of memory; for now,

I awoke on land

 

In the next day;

 

I soaked in the air, like I was an amphibian,

Delightfully graced with my second life;

This cold, like thin freedom in your lungs,

The light in your eyes; “overexposed”

But the warm arm around your neck

And the smell of ozon…

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free,
With love,

Eli,
xx

Thank you!

Reviews

[David Scott]

Eli dear, you have a masterful write here. I love the mystic stories. I felt like I was hearing the song of the mermaids here... Now don't eat me please. ;)

One word seemed out of place. "I awaked" might be better *I awoke*
Loved this poem Eli and the music was perfectly combined to lift your words higher within the soul.

Oh Scott man! I am hungry now lol, just kidding ;) my friend thank you so much! You are so right, thanks for helping me out, I so appreciate it, also what you did for my friend Sugar Plum ♥ for we Euro women need some help anyhow in this big English world... :) Thank you dearly for all you do, and you know, did read your latest already 5 times ;) but I need time to review.... for I like that one!

[David Scott]

Your too sweet Eli. I like the little "plum fairy". She is very intelligent and she is a seeker of great and pure truths. I'm glad I do not offend.

You never do dear friend, for I do love your fantastic imput on my poems, :) and you never either make me moody. For I'm not often moody :) so glad to have you by! Nia Nour, a.k.a. Sugar Plum, is fantastic, I read her since I'm almost on here, and she brings you to other worlds... one of my favs :) for sure as you are too!

[Nihad Dweidary]

I am drawn to any thing "sea and humans". There is so much imagery here to keep me thinking. "Turbid noises": what an image? I love the juxtaposition of so many words here. And especially the "suffocating glamor of a kiss". A simple phrase can tell a long story and your words evoke a lot. Best, -Nihad

Nihad, thank you so much, for your time, and review. I do like it what you see in my words... :) very appreciated!

[Nihad Dweidary]

:-) Thank you for sharing.

[Aubin]

Whenever I read your writing it is always an escape if only for a brief period of time. You truly have mastered the art of transporting a reader into whatever realm you desire. Thank you for writing. I can't wait to see what your future holds.

Thank you so much dear Aubin, I do love to experiment, :) I'm so glad you enjoyed this! you're always welcome in my fantasy world :) xoxo

[Jack...]

I am lost somewhere in a deep brilliant sea of enchantment. My eyes awash with color as I find there is no need to breathe for the breath that I require comes in the form of a sigh from your beautiful words Dear Elisa. So very intoxicating is your amazing poem this day, I swim for the horizon of love...

Thank you so much Jack :) for your sweet words! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh WOW!... I absolutely loved this!...I felt like a mermaid swimming within your skin... how you enveloped my thoughts, as if I were the character in the sea's womb...
and the last stanza was the reward!! Golden!!! Loved every bit of this journey. Thank you for writing this precious gem!~xoxox~:)

Thank you very much! I knew you would feel at home here :) So good to have you by with your precious words, xoxo :) *smile*

[Robbie~xoxo~]

So glad you wrote this... my home indeed! love it, sissy!~xoxo~:)

So happy you enjoyed it! :) It's a magical world.... ;) xoxo :)

[EMMIE]

The music is haunting and beautiful and it goes so great with the poem. This is such a unique idea and it reads so easy. Very creative and amazing style of writing

Thank you dearly EMMIE, I was out of the place, just returned, so good to see you again! come by soon on yours, can't wait, thank you for being the first ! x