~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen

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~ The Heat Rays, Will Die Frozen, Love, Life, Pain, Hurt, Self-Pity, Psychology, Universes, Death, dead, The Same... Geometry

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 ~ The Heat Rays,

          Will Die Frozen

 

 

I shall arise, and go now,

Through the darken night, 

I'm so lost in;

Your selfish pity monster, 

Shining furious fake warmth;

On my night of happiness;

My daylight slumber,

My hypothetical septic matter, 

The trend of your pithiness

I can't handle, the crap of ourselves,

This pathetic playful attention;

My fingers I have so crossed...

Entwined in yours, so lost;

It's you that shall be frozen,

When I'm frozen frost,

And seas of suicide...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

© 2014


Author's Note



Dark New Years....
Enjoy xx

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Pax
How, overwhelming the pain, painted into your words, big sis. More often, the battle within is such epic proportion – “the crap of ourselves”. Sometimes, we do release it upon words of words of painful agony, until it froze in our creative craft. Immortalizing it into poetry, verse by verse, to find the answers, the healing element of the core meaning.

I believed that, when someone read it(our poetic personas, like this piece), then when someone understood what it feels and can relate to it somehow in one way or another, perhaps it brings good effect on us to be stronger than what we believed we are not, atleast that’s what I think so.

I’ve known you big sis, for quite some time now, and I know you write from a very deep perspective. So I believed this piece was taken from a very hard times or decisions or situations in your life or someone else or an experienced what you’ve seen or heard or felt. I think only a very sensitive soul can write such deep psychological perspective.

“My hypothetical septic matter” ~ so very intense, because I do believed that our own thoughts can be very poisonous if not handled very well, and in so many cases we will drown in the “seas of suicide”.

Hugs, big hugs… know that your never alone or this person, that’s what I always tell myself. It’s a big black tunnel we pass through, sometimes we just have one light guiding us and that’s more than enough for us to keep going toward the brighter path. To find that light is just a matter of self-knowing and understanding bright-sides of things hard, I know it will be hard but it’s worth a shot every time you try, so never give up is always an uplifting value.

Intense piece!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you brother, you're true family to me ♥ Your words got cutt-off, but I read you on the live .. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

glitches, again,:), i get worried when your not feeling well, that's what's close family we are here.. read more

10 Years Ago

Muwah! you're the best... I will, listen to you, have to go to the hospital again tomo, but it will .. read more



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My fingers I have so crossed...
Entwined in yours, so lost;

Wow! I can see the new year is off to a mighty prolific start for you, my friend! I wish you much joy and love, and the very best of health!


Love & Light
Kelly



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you love, really...... I'm a bit lost, (I lost too many great people). But I will be ok.... :).. read more
Too many fantastic lines to mention. Romantic as hell.
I think this is why they drop the ball on tv.
Romance only breathes loves unfulfilled desires...

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you my dear friend... I so appreciate your time and review. I will be back :) xo
Oh... potent and chilling!
Hope you are well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Thank you my love xx
Entwined in yours, so lost;
It's you that shall be frozen,
When I'm frozen frost,
And seas of suicide…

A marvellously penned piece with an expert eye to metaphor. Feel better soon.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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10 Years Ago

Thank you my dear friend xx I feel better, as the person I wrote it for, feels better too.... thanks.. read more
wow this is a heavy piece...dripping with sleeting sarcasm...

love the "crap of ourselves" and especially the powerful last three lines you end with...



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10 Years Ago

Thank you jacob, for being here once again. I so appreciate you, and you will know in a while.

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