~ The Listeners

~ How detailed are perceptions? How detailed are people? How detailed are clues?

~ The Listeners

 

    The listeners, were everywhere

           As I was with them

       This rainy day, brought me inside

   Of this golden chapel where

 My introspective

    Voice asked me to stay,

                   My insecure heart

        Wanted to run, but it was my last chance

“I had to stay” " before it was too late!

                   “Honestly”

I have begged in my sleep, and screamed

       To you, to reach, asked you to come,

              So you could join

      The home, of  our dream,

Where violin strings

        Made a life of their own,

And where words aren’t needed,

But you didn’t understood

      You didn’t maybe even listen,

  You were stuck

       The prison of your own

          Restless thoughts,

   The flawless voice of your obsessions,

                      The thousand rats in the gutter

                 Of your head;

               Eating your poor soul, 

                  Spreading viruses

            To your once so clear thoughts

            The black velveteen fields

               Where you’d hiked for days

Did not reached me, my dear,

   They never will.  They never shall.

      For all the Phenomena, which came;

          You - weren’t one... the listeners were,

             They just listened precisely

                  They always did.

 

 

       ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy and do what you must... -xx-

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

We all need listeners in life someone to listen to our strife. To cheer us on in darkened days when all hope is lost and our head is downcast but the good listener won't let this last they will pick us up fast. Then and only then you know you got a good friend. Many blessings reading the listeners. Great Poem.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Always your poems have link to the labyrinth of mind..and that`s your mind, subconsciousness, thoughts...Your wonderful poem shows and presents just to glitter surface of the essence, and other things remain unfolded and untouched in your way. That makes it so easy to feel and hard to understand..And in the same time bringing a peace, as it`s written with peace. Listening is so important, when you do listen to the universe, you stay quiet in yourself, and dont need to move. Listeners are needed for the real expressions of the heart. The more you are "distant" the less any sound could come to you. I love this peace, and the picture to it! (hug)

:: nour ::

[Carl Drake Barnard]

... Painful,a strong poem unlike any other. I could feel the emotions you left behind in this piece. The truest ones the people we want to speak to and want to listen,they never do. Unfortunately. A beautiful piece. Straight from a place I call home the deeper in hart and mind. I enjoyed the read but it's really emotional for me. Wish some people could just listen not just hear.

Well done my sister LOve this poem! 1st 100 I need to give :)
-CDB

What a beautiful review my dear CDB, you really know what I meant with this one. You always know where I come from. It's so good to have you by, and I will return the favor, lol I'm kinda slow, forgive me.... x

[Carl Drake Barnard]

No stress sis :) our writing comes from the same deep place from the same reason It's not hard to know. Imagine your and my writing its like twins we feel each other :) pain anger annoyance that's why I love to review your amazing poems :) Cause I feel your words more than any body else!

You are right, my dear brother. Thank you for understanding... always. You humble me so sweet. It means the world to me C. -xx-

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Soentjies en drukkies :)

Soentjies en drukkies, vir jou ook!! :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Danke shin...? lol

Lol, Dit klink Duits .... dan sou dit wees, Danke "Schön" lol x

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Ahhhhh

[Saddam]

Restless thoughts,
The flawless voice of your obsessions,
The thousand rats in the gutter
Of your head;
Eating your poor soul.

Fabulas wrt. Jst 2 the bst. smiless.....

Thank you for the kind words SSADD, very appreciated. :)

[Ashira Macy]

This is much different than I am used to reading from you, but still a beautiful work of art. It is dark, at least how I envision it, and less dreamy - more statement like. Your descriptions still shine like diamonds in the sun.

Thank you so much Ashira, yes, with this one, I was more cryptic, and it has an deep message. I love diversity, as you do too I noticed today! I'm thankful to you -xx- :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

I am so with this piece. I love the solitude.

Thank you so much Kenneth, I'm glad you do so. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

those who have suffered so much pain at the hands of love.....sometimes just listen with a deaf ear.
they are too wrapped up in their negative thoughts, to hear that one soft, comforting voice that says "you are safe with me" and often relationships that could have been never are...

listening is a good thing...many people don't do it in general.

jacob

So true dear friend, so true. They are in denial. So glad you're one of the Listeners. Take care.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Now this is a flip of the coin... something different to showcase your versatility...
You can write with dramatic flare and be as cryptic as the most cryptic of writers...
We can never truly understand the obsession, or prison of one's thoughts... (I will say no more about that) lol

I enjoyed reading this as much as the first of your poems... hell, I love all your poems! ;)

Mysterious and haunting write, Sis...Excellent work!~xoxo~

Thank you so much for your lovely thoughts Sis. I know this one was a bit hard, to follow, and a little bit more cryptic... lol ;) got you there hah... I can't thank you enough, you know your thoughts mean the world to me, and I hope all is well, I'll catch up today (for me) have been traveling... -xx-

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Inspired work, indeed! I am never left with anything but awe when I find my way to your work! This poem just winds it way further into the chasms of the mind. Wonderful in description, feeling, metaphoric wonders and meanings of deep.

"You - weren’t one... the listeners were, They just listened precisely, They always did."
Wraps it so profoundly for the reader. This type of literary magic can be read over and over and never tire a reader's mind.

You are amazing Raven Sis

Ah, Raven Sis, you get me always, I feel so blessed, and honored with your words. Thank you very much for this review, it means a lot. I'll be back for you, was traveling... -xx- You are amazing too!!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thoughts in our mind are different for different people.. but as we writers ,it feels pathetic hen our lines are misinterpreted .Sad stll when as humans our ideas and words are cunningly distorted by knaves to serve their devious purposes.. i liked the desperate cry of the soul,to awaken thoughts of others but in vain they did not listen.. A very insightful piece of work.

~Sophy

Thank you so much Sophy, for your insight, and beautiful words. I so appreciate you!