~ Teardrops from the Universe

~ Some metaphors can be deeper than you think.

~ Teardrops from the Universe

 

 

Shadows dancing on clear water

From above is every cloud

As a deeper thought

Reflected into the deep azure,

White bottoms of sand

Everything is fluid,

The smell of Ozone

Reflection of the sky

But thoughts drown

As the crying sky,

Opens her heart

And can't be healed

Where tears from the universe

Deepening the mass

As there is no ending

Nor a beginning

It shall just be left right there

To be...

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Thank you xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

"Reflected", "Reflection" of things seen, of things... unseen. The reflection seems to be more internal in this piece. Aftet all, can't the universe be defined from the infinite large to the infinite small? Funny how visual stimulation can trigger such deep emotions, questions. "The smell of Ozone", as a strange electricity connecting us with the rest of the world... Are we all one, or alone? I too reach the conclusion of your words and wonder: "It shall just be left right there/ To be..." Very powerful writing Elisa, you express so much, just beautiful.. Thank you for sharing with us.

What a nice review, again :) happy to read this... thank you very much !!! :)

[John Fitzgerald]

Twinny, you are Creation herself :) This has a deep purity pulsing at its heart, it belongs to everything somehow and is not tied down by humanity, it rises and burns without unneccesary details, finding the heart and piercing it with life-needles :)

[roarke]

A smoothly composed piece that reminds us to let more things be and learn to revel in that awareness. Well said E L

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is profoundly heartbreaking... I feel the clouds of deep thought in the realm of despair.
You have written this in such a Beautiful way...Your talent is overwhelming! Excellent write Eli!
P.S. The music set the tone and gave it life...lovely touch!


"Shadows dancing on clear water
From above is every cloud
As a deeper thought
Reflected into the deep azure,"

"But thoughts drown
As the crying sky,
Opens her heart
And can't be healed" ~ Love these 2 stanzas!

[The White Wolf]

Talk about epic fireworks, soul sis! I felt like you were connected with Gaia herself and catching those tears in the vast ocean of poetry. When water dries up and gives way to land, it can never be replaced. So stunning, my dear friend.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is such a lovely piece. Great depth and beautifully written. xx

[Tim]

Very impressive writing. When I first started reading the words seemed to flow with the music, then I realized it was a video. Both compliment each other and are nicely done. Beautiful scenery!

[Art]

how intriguing that we can find the most depth from within the realities of those Universal thoughts, the visual of life, Nature, and this beauty of creativity captured within poetic sripture...very nice work Elisa...

[rivers]

Elisa...This is absolutely beyond beauty. Your images are perfection and even though your music and video are beautiful as well, I had to read your poem over and over with the perfect background music.
This is a completely stunning presentation...but your writing my dear, is beyond words in the way it grasps my soul...
"As there is no ending
Nor a beginning
I t shall just be left right there
To be...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Elisa my sweet sister, oh yes Mother Earth cries and those of us who see cry with her. This is sooooo lovely. xx

[Whiskurz]

An emotional filled masterpiece......Whisk