weepers

weepers

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the story of the weeper

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Listen close,
       The story of the weeper will bring him closer.
                                           Weeper
When a lonely country boy grew up and found no one to love, he decided to die, unable to live with sorrow. He poisoned himself and met death. Death decided to let him be happy and give him revenge on what he never had, a love. Death told him in his cold voice " I have seen this many times in my days I shall give you one wish for i have wishes to please you, using your ability to cause harm." As the lonely country boy wished, "For a revengeful after life I wish to take the tears and weeps of the sad for they have not been through anything as tough as I" As death gave him the wish he turned into a breathless beast with large gray wings and a wrinkled grey body. Death gave him the order "This is how to work your mystic ability: you must sweep in and ripe their very emotions from their heart and they shall live a whole sad life with know one to love." As the beast grew he gouged one word: Weeper.
         So when your unhappy, and you cry, don't let the weeper find you.

© 2012


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it just came to mind...

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good vibes...let it be!!!
...well done!.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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gah! happy thoughts happy thoughts happy thoughts!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Some editing for grammar and the such aside, this is a great concept. It reads almost like a dark fairy tale - you should try and preserve that as much as possible in this if you do edit it into a more final format.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very good! I like the message it sends out

Posted 12 Years Ago


its great like all your stories

Posted 12 Years Ago


awesome!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great imagery!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Like a fable! I love it! Something to tell children before bed, so they learn not to be vengeful. A very nice little tale you've come up with here! Great Ink!

Aaron

Posted 12 Years Ago


Few grammtical mistakes, but there is one that needs fixing: "...and found know one to love." The "know'' should be "no" if I'm not mistaken. Anyway, the story is mysterious and intersesting with a dark tone to it. Really creative. Good job and keep up the good work

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very dark. I think it would make a magnificent book. A jouney about this boy going out and becoming the Weeper. I would most DEFANETALLY read the book! If you DO make it into a book, I'd read it! But its you're choice not mine or anyone else's. Do what ever you feel like.
Keep it up!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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