Don't Go

Love.

It's just something.

Painful as a bee sting.

See the way it swells me?

It breaks me,

Hurts me,

Blinds me,

Kills me.

Yet I beg and plea,

Please don't leave me.

Don't go,

Don't go.

With this pain I glow,

I shall not woe

I feel my heart sink low.

I embrace pain if it means you don't leave.

I survive in thought that you will believe,

I could survive all that I grieve. 

Don't go,

I couldn't survive the stones you'd throw.

Author's Note

Yes, I rewrote it, because I have learned to write better.

Reviews

[The Batman]

It is not horrible. I believe you could have written more, for this is a good poem, to have made it even better. However, I saw no mistakes and this poem is filled with powerful emotions. The flow is nice and words well-crafted. Nice write. Keep it up :)

[Ruth]

I like the concise quality to this :) A saddening piece that shows the reality to life and relationships! xoxo

[Richard Layne]

not horrible at all Kit Cat. I think its actually one of my favs of yours.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Capturing a very sad moment at the end....
I like the storytellling nature of this poem...
great :)

[Leon R]

Not bad, wouldn't call it horrible. Perhaps you could elaborate more around the end but 'tis just a suggestion. Good work anyway.

[Team_Jaward_Gale]

its not horrible its great and long distance can work if you set your mind to it

[paparapapa]

It's just sad that people nowadays don't try making relationships work whenever distance comes in the picture. Well, anyway, I think you told a story really well with just a few words. This was sad but I had fun reading this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[ΨXO]

A wondrous example of those lil' instances that endow so many unnatural and indescribable emotions. A cursed offspring of our complexion. Very good write.

[~ Stefanie ~]

This isn't horrible at all! Don't think that :) I thought it was really good. You did a great job portraying the emotion of having to leave your first kiss/first love behind. Well done!

[Hannah Is My Name Sadly]

Awe thats sad!