TRIED TO STITCH IT

TRIED TO STITCH IT

A Poem by M. L. F.

Tears of sorrow, try to fix it

Sorry’s never been enough

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Tender heart has grown too tough

Wish I would have caught him in it

Twinkling seas of twisted lust

Talking to me just won’t fix it

Should have thought before he touched

Preyed on innocence to have it

Perversions are his private hush

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Should have sewn his own mouth shut...

© 2016 M. L. F.


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The message is very loud and clear, Misty.
When someone preys on innocence the act can never be forgiven the act itself becomes inhumane whether is small or big, in word or deed because the intentions are malefide. What you wrote as "Talking to me just wont fix" is very right and plain enough.
A very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.:-):-):-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bala. I'm glad the message got through to you. :) Thanks for reading my work... read more



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FIN
I love this. This work is blunt and straight to the point. It's a nice touch to the emotional integrity of the poem.

Your intensity in writing is something that I am growing quite fond of.

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Intensity... is everything. Who wants to be lukewarm?
FIN

3 Years Ago

I meant more "fierce."

Rather than say, kind, gentle, peaceful, etc.
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I'm honored, LR.
The message is very loud and clear, Misty.
When someone preys on innocence the act can never be forgiven the act itself becomes inhumane whether is small or big, in word or deed because the intentions are malefide. What you wrote as "Talking to me just wont fix" is very right and plain enough.
A very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.:-):-):-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bala. I'm glad the message got through to you. :) Thanks for reading my work... read more
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Leo
Creative and piercing like a tip of spear..well done

Posted 3 Years Ago


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I find you writing very intense like you're getting stuff out of the basement. And it is true, their are times that sorry is not enough. I few months ago, I hurt someone and sorry was not enough even though I truly was there are rips that cannot be mended anymore. I really hit home. N.

Posted 3 Years Ago


the concept is incredible; there's so much truth and reality attached to this poem. Loved it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I am glad to hear you liked it. More truth and realit.. read more
Gritty and deep. I love it

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much. ;)
Scarlet Jackal

3 Years Ago

*bows* any time
Extremely well written!! Raw and woven with great skill!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I had quite the arsenal of gasoline to fuel the burn... when the emotional ta.. read more
TheOneWhoNotices

3 Years Ago

Very true! XD You are welcome, it was my pleasure!
Calculated deceit is hard to forgive, as any apparent remorse may be equally deceitful. Those that do the hard sell must expect a hard lesson. A strong unequivocal message in your poem, which I hope was hypothetical and not personal fact.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

I couldn't have said it better myself Norman. That was beautiful what you said, and now I am going .. read more
Misty,
Wow. This one really has a lot of truth in it. So many people go around wearing disguises and since we often don't know who they really are, the disguise is who we perceive them to truly be. Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it.
Semper Fi,
Joe

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

Lol... I would love to learn Latin. It is such a beautiful language really...
Joe W

3 Years Ago

Yeah. i'm currently studying Hebrew
M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

That's intense..
Hate the caps, it seems to be screaming at me. Quite like the rhythm and flow, and that last line provoked a smile, as if you just couldn't help yourself. I don't know about 'twinkling seas of twisted lust'. From what I remember there was nothing twinkling about my lust. This reminds me a little of the type of thing I used to write 40 years ago, when I was more interested in the rhyme and impact than in it actually making sense. Am I supposed to know what the 'white disguise' is? Sorry, I don't.

Posted 3 Years Ago


M. L. F.

3 Years Ago

lol, David... :) The twinkling seas of twisted lust simply represent that he thought he was in some.. read more

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