IN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE

For my father, whose years were far less than I had wished...

Remembering when I was small

You held my hand, I felt so tall

Atop your lap, a mighty throne,

within your shadow where I shone.

You taught me how to catch a fish,

to toss a coin and make a wish

Oh how I wish I had those coins

I’d reverse time just to enjoy

 the sun as it set on the lake,

to stop you on that fateful day -

You took your life, I wasn’t there

Upon your lake of dark despair.

I’d take those shining coins of gold

Back to your shadow...

 ...Where I shone

 

 

 

Reviews

[SZHZIA]

It is the best expression of love for a father from you...
REMEMBERING WHEN I WAS SMALL
YOU HELD MY HAND, I FELT SO TALL
ATOP YOUR LAP, A MIGHTY THRONE
WITHIN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE
The above lines stolen my heart …. It is filled with emotions… really I like it… Thank you for sharing….
Best
Szhzia

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for the time in reading and reviewing my work. I'm glad the feeling resonated with you.
...Misty

[SZHZIA]

It is my pleasure...

[Hannah]

This was really touching. My parents divorced when I was really young, so I didn't see my dad very much. About a week ago, he had a heart attack. And now I'll never see him again. I didn't have a connection to my dad like you had with yours, but this poem still means a lot to me.

[M. L. F.]

My connection with my father was close, but more so when I was smaller. He had a lot of problems and I often longed for more attention from him as well, so I can also relate to the not seeing him much part. I am so so sorry for your pain, and for the sudden loss of your father. Truly, I am... ( Huge huge hug )...Be sure to always know that your father loved you, and that any time he spent away from you, you were assuredly always on his mind, as I was on my father's. Sometimes parents have problems that we pay for as their children through loss of time etc. But I know he looks down on you as we speak, and will watch you grow and succeed throughout life. I hope that thought is of comfort to you at this time... Be with family and friends who love you now, take comfort in them, and in time this pain will be more bearable, I promise....
Take care Hannah,
.... Misty

[M. L. F.]

Also, I hope this doesn't sound too cliche, as I know everyone believes something different about life and death etc... But I really think you WILL see your father again. Hoping all the best for you.. Lots of peace and time to heal.. (more huge hugs)...
..Misty

[Hannah]

You're so sweet to say all those things! You are a very thoughtful person. Thank you for all the kind words! (hugs)

[M. L. F.]

You deserve kind thoughts. And you are more than welcome. (hugs back) :)

[Jacob Clifford]

Very impactful. Very reminiscent. I can practically see emotions running off these words. My father was never part of my life, so I can't claim to be able to relate. Regardless, the grandeur of this piece isn't lost to me. Such terrible things are too often forced upon great people. Take care, Misty.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you so much Clifford. :) Your review means a lot. It felt really good hearing that you could see the emotions on the words, that was the intention. I'm sorry about your loss of time with your father too. Thank you for reviewing this work Clifford.
... Misty

[A. Amos]

You make me miss my dad...awesome!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you. Glad to hear that the poem was moving for you. Really..

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Yes my friend, yes this is beautifuly drawn.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. :)

[Tsubaki Kuro]

That touched my heart. It is both sad and beautiful. Great job.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Tsubaki... Glad it reached you..

[mattavelli]

This is a lovely poem and a sad story. Thanks for sharing it.

[Robert Parlange]

I'm so sorry to hear about your father. Memories can be a comfort; they help us survive.

[M. L. F.]

Hi Robert.. Yes, they can be. I lost him a while back, but looking at my two year old son who has the same mouth as my father and myself, makes me realize that he and my son will miss out.. It is the first time I have written about him in a long time. It proved quite cathartic, so I am glad I did... :) Thanks for the read and the kind words Robert.. As always, they are appreciated..

[hcarson]

oh my word what a lovely, heartfelt piece. you can feeel the emotion coming through the words in this one. such a sad poem :( but a beautiful piece of word to remind everyone who reads of your love and respect for someone who made you feel ten foot tall. beautifully done, full marks

[M. L. F.]

Thank you so much. Your words mean a lot to me...