IN THE DEPTHS

TO MY ANGELS, THREE..

In the depths of her womb grew a darkening tomb

While the earth crashed around her eclipsing her moon

And the mother, so far along, reeled in great shock

When the little heart no longer thump as it ought

 And the soul of the angel whom heaven had sought

Soared upwards to heaven without a sad thought

But except for his mother asleep in her bed

He stopped first to hover there over her head

Watching her sleep, he laid hand on her heart

And whispered, “In heaven, we never shall part”

Author's Note

For my three sleeping sons...
Xavier, Jude, and Ayden...I will see you again... Assuredly I will....

Reviews

[Bear]

Bravo! Nice rhyme scheme and good emotional depth, I like dark poetry as it is closer to realism and how can you truly know real happiness if you have never been touched by the pain and sorrow of the darker side of life. I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Bear. Yes, it is hard to truly appreciate the light until you have been locked in a dark closet or two. Metaphorically speaking, of course. ;) Glad you enjoyed the write.

[Nature]

Beautiful. Sadness and happiness together. If this is the level of poetry, I am not a poet. Looking forward for some tips from you.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you so much.. I would be glad to give advice when I can😊

[Matching Socks]

ML, I can't express how this moves me. A beautiful poem that I understand.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Ana.... Yes, the pain is real, but so is the hope. Glad I am not alone. :)
...Misty

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome Misty.

[Jacob Clifford]

Very haunting and piercing. I like that the poem, while it has despair and sadness, it focused more on hope and positivity than anything.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Clifford.. I have a hopeful heart on the subject, so I am glad that came through... :)

[alanwgraham]

What a sad story. I like the conclusion and the bit about the soul of the angel. One small thing that does jar for me is the word thump.! I think that beats might be better.
Well done.
Alan

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for the review Alan... :)
..Misty

[.]

This is hauntingly beautiful. An amazing piece of writing.

Filled with sadness, loss, despair yet ending on a truimphant note, full of love and hope and rays of light straight to the heart.
This is beautifully rhymed, flowing like a river of sunbeams in the darkness.
Tragic in its theme, hopeful in its spirit and courageous in its construction.
A very fine piece of writing, Misty. Certainly amongst the better poems i have read here on cafe in my three months of being here.
Simply brilliant. Well Done!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Doodley... I wanted a fitting tribute for them. And being that it is an experience I had three times, it was a feeling I knew well, and wanted to deeply express. Thank you so much for the kind words and for the review. I am glad you liked the work..
..Misty

[.]

No need to worry. This poem is a very beautiful tribute to your beloved boys. You should be very proud. Take care. Keep writing!

[M. L. F.]

I will, thanks Doodley!

[Nicholas Shea]

This is devastatingly beautiful. I'm speechless. Looking forward to reading more of your writing!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Nicholas. Trying to get my first chapter edited to post, but there are some other poems and a story here if you're feeling bored. ;) Thanks for taking the time to read and review my work. I love to write, so I will surely keep doing it.
..Misty

[Ruth]

This really is quite soul wrenching and yet faithful...I have no doubt that you will meet them again and find it inspirational that you keep such in your heart...astounding piece Misty and one that left me humbled to read you today :)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Poppy. I am glad you liked the message of the piece, and that it came through loud and clear for you. Sometimes I like to deep think, and this was one of those time. Thank you for the read and the review Poppy...
..Misty

[John Fitzgerald]

such a beautiful and moving tribute. It's hard to express how Kuching admiration for what you have expressed here. Such exposed feelings but hopeful feelings that speak of the wheel that turns on everything and our shared humanity. Such courageous words

[M. L. F.]

If you read much of my work, particularly my poetry, you will see I am quite the feeling exhibitionist. :) As my friend Takeshi says, better out than in.. wise words. I am glad I let it out and you all have taken the time to let it in. Thank you for the review.
...Misty

[John Fitzgerald]

I am glad too. Have to say the phrasing of 'the feeling exhibitionist' gave me a chuckle! :) I will certainly be writing more, if not all of your writing!

[M. L. F.]

Ha, glad to make laughter too. Thank you for the reads, always appreciated.
..Misty

[Bacchus]

Yes- the ones that where the womb is there tomb- we will surely meet again.
And I believe there are experiences that transcend what people think we might just write.
It is true.
Powerful, tender, sad, and assuring.

[M. L. F.]

Yes, innocent lives surely go to good places and await those that love them without end. I am so happy to know that the feeling driving the work rose to the surface for you. I wanted something out there for my sons. Thank you for your time and for the review.
...Misty