IN THE DEPTHS

TO MY ANGELS, THREE..

In the depths of her womb grew a darkening tomb

While the earth crashed around her eclipsing her moon

And the mother, so far along, reeled in great shock

When the little heart no longer thump as it ought

 And the soul of the angel whom heaven had sought

Soared upwards to heaven without a sad thought

But except for his mother asleep in her bed

He stopped first to hover there over her head

Watching her sleep, he laid hand on her heart

And whispered, “In heaven, we never shall part”

Author's Note

For my three sleeping sons...
Xavier, Jude, and Ayden...I will see you again... Assuredly I will....

Reviews

[Bear]

Bravo! Nice rhyme scheme and good emotional depth, I like dark poetry as it is closer to realism and how can you truly know real happiness if you have never been touched by the pain and sorrow of the darker side of life. I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Bear. Yes, it is hard to truly appreciate the light until you have been locked in a dark closet or two. Metaphorically speaking, of course. ;) Glad you enjoyed the write.

[JamesD]

Captivating and moving. I can feel your emotion and love for them. So well written!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much James.. The emotion is intense, just glad if I captured even a tenth of that for the reader, for my sons... :) So happy to hear that the work really resonated with you...
..Misty

[Aventicus]

Beautiful, absolutely beautiful, and a wondrous expression of your love for your sons.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you so much... I wanted to tribute them somehow and give myself something peaceful to read and think of them fondly and with hope for the future. So glad you felt the emotion of this piece.
..Misty

[Tsubaki Kuro]

What a beautiful poem here M. L. Franchello. It is very deep. Great Job. :)

[M. L. F.]

Tsubaki... Thank you. Your review is greatly appreciated here, as always. Glad you liked the work.
..Misty

[Desert Rose]

oh wow...oh wow...my eyes just glazed..
now i wanna know your story..

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for the time in reading the work.. The story is intricate indeed, like a woven tapestry, but it's the trials that bend and form the character.
..Misty

[Takeshi Yamada]

Wow, Misty...beautiful. I had chills throughout the entire piece. It is a tragic situation, but the mood wasn't overwhelmingly sad and negative, but a hopeful piece reminding us that those who move on are in better places...and they're waiting for us to join them.

From the Tao Te Ching by my favorite philosopher Lao Tzu:
"Watch the turmoil of beings,
but contemplate their return.
Each separate being in the universe
returns to the common source.
Returning to the source is serenity."

This theme arises again and again throughout the world, regardless of religion or societal tendencies - we all return to the source from which we sprung. That and the personal experiences I've had that I'll tell you about another time fill me with surety that you will indeed meet your three boys again.

[M. L. F.]

Takeshi... You always "get it".. I adore the Lao Tzu quotes you posted here. And I can't wait to hear the tales, I am sure I will. Thank you so much for the kind assurance and for lending your time to my work... As always.

..Misty