Functionality

Bleh?

It’s a slippery   S

                                L

                                                  O

  P

                  E

From here on,

Time will   f l y   by,

And your reflection                                                                         noitcelfer

Will start to                                      s i g h

In despair over the

D i s r e p a i r

Of what was once

Functional.

You’re on the      h i g h w a y         to

Hell.

And you’ll stay on it from here on,

Your ability to

P a u s e

Time,

Will pause itself.

And the blue skies will

Be  e.n.d.l.e.s.s.  greys,

Hanging from thin

Threads of                              d e s p a i r          ,

Mourning the d i s r e p a i r

Of what will never be

F u n c t I o n a l          .

 

Author's Note

Let me know what you think. Ignore the P in slope, it's being stubborn and won't stay in place. And I can't get it to go back to where it belongs. v.v'

Reviews

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Fantabulous!!

~Fuzzy

[paul]

i like the way you break up the words. and lines. it's different. and different
is good. plus, the content of this poem is excellent

[Derek S.Keck]

This is exactly what i try to go for in my poetry. You put profound meaning into your work! I love the hopelessness in an unstoppable march towards death, but some tone of understanding that all of our despair and loss is unavoidable. It holds all the reasons of why life is so fragile. Beautiful work! (Feel free to tell me my interpretation is off by a mile, it often is) I really dig your format too. It's really unique and adds a nice switch up in convention.

You’re on the h i g h w a y to
Hell.
And you’ll stay on it from here on,
Your ability to
P a u s e
Time,
Will pause itself.
And the blue skies will
Be e.n.d.l.e.s.s. greys,

[E.Gleaves]

The way you formatted the word slope was very effective because it mimics an actual slope. Sometimes when you emphasize words they do not have that same power though. For example when you italicize "fly" it does not hold the same power as placing the spaces between the word "sigh" When you ssigh you take in a deep breath. You mimic that on the page by using the spaces. This was a very experimental and creative write, but it's going to be hard to make every textual decision you make equally as powerful as the really good ones you have

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Delightful!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

What a work of art, not only the poem itself but the format. Wow!

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I really love the structure and whimsy of this poem. The fact that you took the time to highlight certain words with different characters was fun to read and also brought an interesting flow to the poem. Great work with that structure. Look forward to reading more!

[Jim Parson]

Someone has too much time on their hands...ha ha! You know what, Adora? This is a really great poem, very intelligent and cleverly presented. The format overshadows it though. I was so busy studying the format, I lost touch with the words. The flipside of that is, I read it several times so I got to enjoy both the poem and the structure. Unfortunately, my mind was only able to embrace them separately.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

I like the format, great poem ; )