My Lady

will you say it just once...

My fair lady
with such cruel beauty

 tell me that you love me
 fair lady
with such succulent lips
kiss me,
then tell me that you missed me
dear fair lady
with such dirty green eyes
why do you hold such contempt
in your steady gaze
Beloved fair lady
have you done something
that bodes ill with your heart
making you look so guilty
as I hold you lose like a lover should
hey fair lady
with that sweet honey voice
tell me that you love me
My fair lady
My lovely jaded lady
please tell me that you love me

Author's Note

tell me what you think. Should I leave it as it is or change it?

Reviews

did u have the image first or did you write the poem first? They go very well together. Your writing's changed. But your style is still wonderful! I enjoyed reading this. you know the line "with that sweet honey voice" I was temted to read it as "honey sweet voice". Just something I noticed. Don't change it cuz its better this way. :) Great work!

[manifesto]

Dark emotions, but sad and sweet. I like the repetition, adds strength to the message. :)

[al25]

Really like it. Seems like shes one of those people that you can never understand which makes her all the more attractive.

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well friend,
do consider submitting a couple of your poems to my new magazine.
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We have no restrictions on themes or style. Only this December is about Christmas.

Regards Amit

[Anna]

I did not like this I am not sue but I think it was the "hey fair lady" reapiting over and over. I think you should work on it more. But great job I liked how you did not make her seem so great. I liked that very much

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Nice lady and sounds like love music, accompanied on a guitar...:)

[Amy Bumpas]

I got a sense of mystery while reading this...it does keep ones
interest.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

lyrical and feels like a song~I wonder what is it about green eyes that either engeders adoration or contempt~

[Aven]

jade eyes and jaded tooth... the world is full of lovely ladies, but there can only be one love... what are the odds that she feels the same way? lovely write.

[KAREN]

I like as it is! I thought it was nicely written!!