Ravens

Viking

The sky was a clear Autumn blue

As three ravens overhead flew

My eyes followed the arc of their glistening black wing

And I heard the song that they always sing

The forest, fields, sky and wherever

Everything that may ones be

Is Odin's to rule forever and ever

And for us to oversee

They cawed and fluttered 

Not one more sound they uttered.

Two veering left and one flew right

I tried to keep them all in my sight

They must be off to Odin no doubt

To tell him of what the humans are about

I send along the Rainbow Bridge a prayer

Hoping to avoid the one-eyed gods all-knowing stare

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not my favourite piece of yours. The intent is great, the scene setting feels natural and expressive. I think the word 'Wearing' in the third stanza must be a typo? Did you mean bearing? The final line of that stanza might meter better without the word 'my'? Liked it still!

[Yheela]

Thank you for your review.
I'll think about the "my" and yes! it was a typo ... that's what you get for sitting up past midnight writing poetry. lol

[Hadewijch Lady of the N..]

I like this poem very much.
"The forest, fields, sky and wherever
Everything that may ones be
Is Odin's to rule forever and ever
And for us to oversee"

Lovely!

Hail Odin! Hail from the North,

Hadewijch

[Yheela]

Thank you very much.

[zainul]

Amazing piece

[Yheela]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[zainul]

You are welcome,my friend.

[Stanley Wilson]

wow enjoyed this thanks for sharing this one loved the mythology input

[Yheela]

Thank you!

[FantasyLover24601]

Very descriptive! The few Norse myths I've read are among my favorite stories because the gods were so different from the Greek gods. I also love Greek mythology, but Norse mythology has a lot of awesome to it and I think that I enjoy it a bit more than Greek mythology because it's something new.

[Yheela]

To me there isn't much that tops Norse Mythology. But then I might be bias ... ^_^

[Cole Hayley]

The forest, fields, sky and wherever
Everything that may ones be
Is Odin's to rule forever and ever
And for us to oversee


What a stanza and what a poem. brillance for sure.

[Yheela]

(^_^)/ Thank you!

[Enid Blake]

I like the content of this poem, and the reference to Odin! The rhythm's good, following the ravens' flight :)

[Yheela]

Thank you, glad you like it! ^_^

[Dr. Wood ?]

very Viking....You would understand this more than I...I loved the way it had two voices, it's difficult to get that right, and I envy you your folk lore...you have done it proud

[Yheela]

Thank you ever so much! ^_^

[Dr. Wood ?]

that's ok....We all need to be here for each other on here, it is what makes this site tick...You have a talent and you're using it..can't say much more than that...

[Baby Ricochet]

Love the Odin Reference. Great job!

[Yheela]

Thanks!