A Walk Into An Ocean

About a girl who walks into an ocean to her death.

 

She's walking into a cold bitter sea

She can feel the icy water touch her on the knee

She continues to walk further and further

Then it starts to hurt her

 

Her vains freezing like ice

At first the coldness felt nice

But then it makes her vains turn darker blue

And thats when her uncaring thoughts grew

 

She's shivering and cannot stop

And soon she hears a pop

She falls deeper and deeper under the water

She starts to wonder if sombody saw her

 

Gasping for a breath and pleading for a rest

Sinking to the bottom and curled in a nest

With her eyes closed and unable to breathe

Then she sinks and goes deeper underneath

 

She's at her watery grave

It would of been better if she would of been saved

It's a walk into an ocean nobody will forget

Now she is laying in her underwater pit

 

Reviews

[deeps]

Wow, This is amazing, I liked this alot!

[Krazy On The Outside]

It's absoulutely amazing!
I LOVE it! =)

[mystic soul]

it's very scary..... but great work ......... :) 10/10............

[Isericanormal]

its dark and scary how things like this do happen. Its written well tho, good job.