Becoming Skin

If your time is of an essence
you should know
Eventually each one of us are cold
The kind of chill that
won't care if you're young
The kind that stills the air
inside my lungs,
the kind thats outside my door
when not welcomed in
My head spins
My back breaks
My fists were clinched
as all my thoughts wished
for the words to say
I never get my way

You're still outside my door
If there's another side
what's my reflection for

Preach of the search for yourself
You sit alone in your house
Down on the path to resolve
what's affecting us all
What kind of weapon
looks like a wooden cross
when the nails are held in
with God's mercy and love
Don't you like to pull down
what was held up above
cuz you're doing it wrong
and I know this because

If the ending just wants to begin
then the salt of the earth dreams of becoming skin
and the man in the moon thinks about having wings
Sometimes perspective is everything

Reviews

[Twizzler]

This is an amazing write. Poetic and thought provoking. Thanx for sharing :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thanks for reading it! I'm glad you liked, if I can write something thought provoking I'm doing my job, on the Internet at least..lol. Thanks again!!!

[AprilRN1210]

This is quite impressive.. I was enchanted from the first stanza but the last one is my absolute favorite.. stunning... the more times I read this, the more captivated by it I became.. few I read on here do that.. I am in awe of the depth, the flow, the imagery, the power in the message of this piece. absolutely magnificent writing... favorite for sure... and you are right... perspective is everything..

one thing I noticed.. (the kind thats outside my door)--- (that's) think it needs an apostrophe.. could be wrong though, wouldn't be the first time or the last.. ha... just trying to help.. the piece is so amazing, couldn't really fault anything...

[Zakari Schmidt]

Wow thank you!!! That means a lot to me and fill further inspire me to improve and look outside the box. This is one of my personal favorites so I'm glad we have that in common haha. For real, thanks for reading my stuff and always giving awesome reviews...totally look forward to it. Thank you again

...and you're right about that apostrophe :D

[Zakari Schmidt]

*will further lol...typo about ruined my heartfelt sentiment

[AprilRN1210]

It was my pleasure sir... and ha.. imagine that... I got it right... wahooo! gold star for me... guess I was paying attention that day in English class instead of doodling on my paper and staring out the window.. my teacher would be proud.. kidding aside, you should be very proud of this piece.. it's freaking awesome!! you are more than welcome:)

[AprilRN1210]

yup, queen of typos here.. knew what you were saying.. :P
mine are usually due to autocorrect... I mean, this stinking phone thinks it knows more than me.. always trying to tell me what I meant to say.. ummmm.. no thanks.. I am pretty sure I know what I am doing... yeah well... at least people know from the "get-go" that I am silly and a little crazy, so when my messages get all discombobulated they know it is only partially my fault.. lol

[Zakari Schmidt]

Haha don't sell yourself short!!! Apparently I WASN'T paying attention cuz that's 2 right there...some English major I was.....hahaha thanks again though I am really proud of this one. It didn't have a name until I put it on here. My phones horrible about making assumptions as well! Damn iPhones.. Of course, it's my fault 99 percent of the time. Maybe people will catch on with me soon :D

[AprilRN1210]

wow, impressed.. English major.. ha... will have to pick YOUR brain.. I was the nerd and went the "science" route.. usually don't title my pieces until I am done with them either... 99% of the time, eh?... funny, and honest of you to admit that.. I would have to say mine is usually 60/40 with me behind by a small margin.. and trouble with them "catching on" is they start to tease you for it... can't tell you how many times mishaps with my phone get passed around as the joke of the day between my friends.. pfffft... least it gives me an opportunity to use my sarcasm :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Pick away my friend..nothing toooo impressive I'm sure lol. I'm honest to a fault. I usually have working titles but that one had nothin. And I thought it fit great. 60/40 is a respectable rate for typo responsibility these days I usually deal with the opposite and make me look like the stickler :P

[AprilRN1210]

"respectable rate for typo responsibility these days".... you have me seriously giggling over here.. oh my goodness.. cute... and be careful what you agree to... I will surely do it.. can't promise I will be gentle either... I have a curious spirit and once I start digging, I can be relentless.. especially if intrigued and interesting.... (just saying)...

[Zakari Schmidt]

I try, I try (I swear) lol..if there were terms to this agreement I might scroll through them but I'd definitely click "agree" ..I may end up picking your brain April you never knowwww

[AprilRN1210]

the devil is in those details though.. ya know?... and scary concept... my brain?... pheeew, that needs another disclaimer and agreement itself!!... I see how it is.... trying to make me giggle over there, eh?... hmmmm.. not hard to do if throw wit and sarcasm in the mix... it's the cheese you gotta watch out for... gets the gong every time.. (almost)...

[Zakari Schmidt]

Oh I'll make some kind of deal with your detail devil ;) I'm all about the cheese...American, Swiss, cheddar,mozzarella, ricotta, cottage...

[AprilRN1210]

makin' deals with the devil.... uh oh... that has my mischievous side over here jumping up and down with delight.. careful... cheese whiz it seems... Ha!... looks like I may be the one in trouble on that end of the cheddar stick... :P

[Zakari Schmidt]

There may be a trampoline in your future then..padded walls...lol too much? We're not crazy!! In all seriousness, you may be correct about the cheddar stick but the cheese wiz is a different story..

[AprilRN1210]

you crack me up... love it!! I actually work part time as a nurse in a residential psychiatric facility, so pretty close... well, just going from your words sir.. you are, after all, "all about the cheese".. scroll up, if you don't remember :P

[Zakari Schmidt]

Touché, April...lol you know what you're talking about...I'm glad to have you as an ally :) don't think you don't crack me up as well! I'll look forward to reading more of your work soon poet

[AprilRN1210]

sorry, couldn't resist.. and was giggling the whole time typing... I make an awesome opponent, but a better ally, I agree:)
oh goody! someone who gets my dry, sarcastic humor!! wahoo!! exciting!! just means you are in trouble!! ooooh... lol

[Frieda P]

Edgy and thought provoking, love the line...

The kind of chill that
won't care if you're young.

“Many men go fishing all of their lives without knowing that it is not fish they are after.”~ Henry David Thoreau

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you so much for checking out my work.. I appreciate your kind words and insightful quote by one of my fav authors!!

[Eliza Mae]

All I have to say is... Wow.. *applause*

[Zakari Schmidt]

Thank you Eliza! I'm glad u liked it :) *bows graciously*