Misunderstanding

Misunderstanding

A Story by Craig2591
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Something a little different this time.

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Sarah pulled her car off of the road onto the gravel driveway and stopped at the rusted gate that blocked further entrance. There was no fence attached to the gate. It was only meant to keep unwanted vehicles from entering further. The driveway disappeared into the woods. She got out of the car, stepped around the gate and continued on foot. She paused a moment to turn and look back at her car. They were on her trail, but she had a significant head-start and it would be awhile before they were able to trace her there. Still, she didn't like leaving it by the side of the road where it might attract attention. She sighed and shrugged. She didn't really have any choice. She turned and continued up the driveway.


She smelled the damp leaf mould and heard birdsong echo through the trees as she walked. A crow cawed a warning that a stranger was in the woods. Morning was getting on and the sun filtered through the trees and dappled the gravel at her feet. Any other day she might have enjoyed such a pleasant walk.


It didn't take long before she came to a small clearing with a house trailer in mild disrepair, a brand new, detached, two-car garage, and an older model white sedan with a few rust stains in the finish. Next to the trailer was a concrete patio with a canvas sun-shade over it. Under the sun-shade was a weathered wooden picnic table. At the picnic table stood a young man working on a piece of machinery that was on the table. He was in his twenties, lean and slightly muscular with medium length, sandy blond hair. Sarah felt a slight twinge in her heart when she saw him. It had been at least eight months since she had seen him last and she had forgotten how good he looked, even in a grease stained t-shirt with his hair uncombed and a four day growth of beard on his face.


He looked up from his work when he noticed her approaching. She watched the expression on his face change from curiosity to surprise... and then to anger.


“Hello, Jason,” she said with a faint smile when she reached him.


He glared at her. “What do you want?!” he replied, not even attempting to hide the hostility in his voice.


She couldn't really blame him. Not after what she'd done. Some day she would explain, but today there was no time. They were after her. “I need a spectral, two-phase encoder,” she said. She looked down sheepishly. “I didn't know where else to go.”


He glared at her in silence for several seconds before he answered, “Those are illegal.”


“I know,” she nodded, “Do you have one?”


He glared at her again, this time for much longer. She half expected him to tell her to go to hell. He finally nodded and said, “It comes with a steep price, though.


“I have money,” she said, pulling a wad of bills out of her bag and holding it up for him to see.


He looked at the cash disdainfully and said, “I don't want your money, and I don't think you're willing to pay what I want.”


She closed her eyes. So that was how it was going to be. She was disappointed in him. She had thought he was above that sort of thing. “I'll pay anything,” she said.


He raised one eyebrow. “Anything?


She nodded. “I have to have it.”


“Wait here,” he said. He turned and went into the trailer. Two minutes later he returned with a small, black metallic devise with colored wires protruding from it. She reached for it but he pulled his hand away.  "Not so fast," he said.


She looked down at the ground and said, “Name your price.”


He pause for several seconds before he said in a low voice, “Never, ever contact me again... that's my price!”


She looked up at him with shock and dismay. Did he hate her that much?! He was right. The price was too dear. She could never agree to it. Then she looked back down at the ground and closed her eyes. She had to have it. She held her hand out and slowly nodded her head.


She felt him place the device in her hand, but before he released it he repeated, “Ever!” She nodded again and he let go of it and withdrew his hand.


When she opened her eyes she saw that he had returned to his work as if nothing had happened.


“Thank you,” she said in a quiet voice.


He ignored her.


“Goodbye, Jason,”


No response.


She turned and started back down the driveway, blinking back tears. She knew that she could make him understand if she just explained everything. But it would take at least an hour and she didn't have the time.


And now... she would never have the opportunity.

© 2012 Craig2591


Author's Note

Craig2591
I have lots more Ian and Chrissy stories coming. I just thought I'd take a break and try something else for a change.

As always, suggestions and criticisms are welcome.

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I find the descriptions to be a bit shallow, but I think its because i'm used to analogies when i'm reading and writing. The dialogue was excellent. The punctuation was good, speech realistic and you were able to convey real emotions in the way you wrote the conversation. The beginning and the ending leave a lot of room for expansion. This could be an event happening towards the end of a longer story. An event in the middle, or the beginning of a story. Either way you'll most likely have to use some flashbacks to cover all the issues. Overall it was quite good. I'm pretty sure i'd read the sequel or prequel to it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much.



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So many questions! But I love the mystery! I can just imagine what shes done, what could she have done to need an encoder?
I could feel her pain at the price she was given, and it makes me wonder what she could have done to make him hurt and hate so much. He was so cold and . . . hateful, seriously that level of anger. What did she do???!!!
Anyway, I really loved this story, it'd be great if you continued, from what I've read of yours you could do it if you wanted to. Great story!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Omg. I got tears in my eyes

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

10 Years Ago

Thank you. That's quite a compliment.
I am looking forward to him contacting her!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

I suppose that's a possible outcome. Thanks.
Annie Ale

11 Years Ago

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Very interesting. I feel like I sat down to watch a movie after it already started. I desperately want to know how the situation in your story came to be and what happens next. What you have here I really liked.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
Star Wolf

11 Years Ago

:)
Very intense piece that really leaves your readers wanting more. Great job on this, however. Maybe more of their story will come to you and they'll demand you write it down! Good job on this!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

Thanks!
This was really great! It leaves so many questions, like what did she do to him?! Who is after her & why? Great intensity.
My only question regarding the writing style is when she sees the house and you describe it all, you mention him last. I always wonder how effective this is, since I'm sure she saw him first and he was all she really saw, at least that's all I would see if I were her.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and constructive criticism. You have a point.
I don't think y ou should expand on this> It needs the mystery you've given it for the solid impact it has.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

Yes. I like to let the reader develop their own back-story to it.

Thanks for the revie.. read more
This story is so beautiful... I can feel her pain so strongly... This may be one of my favorite stories of yours!!!
I really really love this... I want to know more... I want to know what she's done. Is there a chance this could be longer??? I really LOVE it!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Craig2591

11 Years Ago

Wow! And to think I almost didn't post this. Thank you very much, Kaya.

I don't plan .. read more
Kaya

11 Years Ago

I hate to think what else you've decided to hide from the world!!!

Thats a shame... I .. read more

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Added on December 16, 2012
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