Working On A Broken Adage

For anyone who had to give up on their passion for the sake of a safer career

I'm working on a broken adage

With scissors bent and glue run dry;

It isn't brutal; just gentle damage

Though I can't seem to find out why.

 

No one's spoken; no one's stirred,

I've been through a life and half of work;

My hands are trembling, my eyes are blurred

And I sure can't savour my handiwork.

 

Can what's broken once again be new?

I hold my bandaged adage - see

Its tattered edge in better view;

Can this be new? No, this can't be.

 

For tuppence or so in recompense

I'll work on this with rigour

Please leave me hence, and I'll commence

To make a fist of this with vigour.

 

 

 

Reviews

[jasonguinn789]

Wow.

I really liked this poem a lot. The beginning hooked me right away and I really found myself enjoying the narration, descriptions, and general flow of this poem. Really good mate, which I could give you some technical feedback about it, but can't find any. Really good.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thanks man! Glad you enjoyed it :)

[icelandicblue]

Not all adages hold over time. I like the worried thoughts that rhyme perfectly throughout your poem and the resolve to continue though you may not be able to succeed. A message of never giving up. I loved these lines:
No one's spoken; no one's stirred,
I've been through a life and half of work;
My hands are trembling, my eyes are blurred
And I sure can't savour my handiwork.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much :) The point about adages I wanted to bring up, as a side thought is that we tend to cast old ideals away as we "progress" as a whole. Some of these proverbs might not hold over time, as you point out. But some people ignore old sayings just because they are old. Who knows, maybe these old sayings hold more wisdom than we do?

[Baban.A.A]

generally, it was what I wanted to read here for awgile, your picks are great. I am confirming the belief that dreams, passions, appetences, and aspirations are always rejected, battled, struggled, beligueared by people and society you know why because it is personal. people likes general things, things serve the public, in their eyes these hobies are trivial and bagattele, and to be assured people affect other people so when you find out your passion is not accepted or believed by people around you , you gradually instead of acruing , will give them up to something they prefer as reasonable, profitable and avail, but then that passion, or dream will stay as an animated death, one opportunity, they will rise once more because they were always there, never died. sorry for being long but it was a very amazing topic to discuss and share thanks again and well done.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts! Yes, and this problem deserves much thought, though I think there's no real solution to it. Ultimately, it depends I guess on whether the person can afford to risk following his passions truly.

[Baban.A.A]

you are right , also some passions does not deserve and worht risking. most welcome......