Clownfish

I am incapable of hiding thoughts.

It hurts.

I am incapable of telling a lie.

It pricks.

I am incapable of illogical judgment.

It stings.

I am incapable of irate inanity.

It cuts. 

I am incapable of being rude.

It stabs.

I am incapable of hurting anyone on purpose.

It kills me.

 

Apparently, you can't be a clownfish

In the midst of sharks.

Reviews

[Augustus]

I think I know what this is about...I have not seen too many of this nature from you, Abdul... But it is an experiment which has gone well I think... The clownfish among sharks metaphor is a rather interesting one... The shark bit is easy to understand, but the clownfish is harder....It signifies weakness for sure, especially since it is pitted against sharks...but the "clown" part in the name also speaks to me of imminent ridicule...or at least the pain you feel when you're made to look like a fool...Also, the phrase "irate inanity" stood out for me..... It is a great choice of words and the alliteration empowers it further...
A deep poem conveyed very simply...Good work!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

That image did not prepare me for what was to come.I liked the poem from the first line..cause it reminds me of myself.A vulnerable piece and relatively short for you..
Well written..

[An owl on the moon]

The image drew me in (I love Nemo), yet your profound flow simply stunned me. This has such a brilliant mix of life and metaphor, and shares a rich wisdom that reminds me of a modern Aesop. Excellent!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Ah, hot from the heart. Well I can say this, If you can't be clown fish, be 'Joker' fish! "Why so serious, son?" =)

[alan peter kelly]

one cannot be too much of ANYTHING but a SHARK amongst sharks...:) enjoyed the read...

[Adelia Alighieri]

LOL, very nice. I just saw a new side of your work. Well done.

[Wicahpi]

I'd say that's the truth.

I love clownfish!! They are so adorable
and playful :)

[KatiePie]

Oh dear...
You can be, because even those who haven't smiled in so long, that if they tried it'd hurt, well.... Those people still love a warm hearted smile upon a face, even if it is the face of another. I don't think I did very well at wording myself in this comment, so forgive me?
And, I usually don't like poetry that uses repetition, just because it can feel like the piece is dragging on, but this is beautifully done, really. I loved it, I completely enjoyed reading it and it sent your message loud and clear.
Beautiful write ^-^
-Cathrine

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

How true!

[Dupree]

Well I won't claim to know your writing style but I get what you mean and you are right you can't be a clownfish in the midst of sharks. This is a strong piece. Impressive wording. Personally I love this piece. It shows how one must be as strong as the ones who surround them. At least that is what I have taken from this.