Life's a box of chocolates

Not necessarily inspired by Forrest Gump, but yea, the movie did influence me while writing this poem!

Of all the questions in the world,
there's one for me that stands aloof.
Is change the only constant and
am I the breathing living proof?
For cliches it may be a bait,
but not for one who's living proof;
It represents a hope for him,
for he who's hurt and stands aloof.

There is no stasis in this world:
each atom testifies to you
Each rose that dies in blooming land
dies with the hope it gives anew.
For life's a box of chocolates;
Refreshing - for it gives anew.
If what you get is much too grim,
it gifts the sweetest sweet to you.

Author's Note

This was my first poem in meter.
The odd numbered lines of both verses rhyme.
Rhyme scheme : aBcbdbeB aFcfdfeF
The last two words of the 2nd and 8th lines, and the 4th and 6th lines are the same.

Written 12/16/09

Reviews

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like the rhyming scheme, very cleverly dealt with. Haven't watched Forrest Gump though, hope that doesn't do any harm :P Great work!

[Ashley.M.E]

this is really good. Like all of your poems are xD well done.

[Radha Jaisingh]

For life's a box of chocolates;
Refreshing - for it gives anew.
If what you get is much too grim,
it gifts the sweetest sweet to you.

I love those lines..........and its so true that choclates always giftd the sweetest sweet to u:)

[FlawedByDesign]

I have to say the 2nd stanza is much stronger than the first in my opinion. The last line of the first stanza, "for he who's hurt and stands aloof" didn't quite jive for me with the rest of the poem. I understand the sense of hope that exists in the change that may get him out of hardship and mend his wounds, but personally it was a bit disconnected from the rest though kept together with the rhyme. The rhyme is a little unusual, but you've stuck to it and delivered a very good write.

Other than that little pet peeve, really well done :)

[Wicahpi]

a brilliant mind wrote this.

[R E Tree]

This is so well planned I can tell there has been a lot of thought. I don't know if I could make a poem designed to be like that it sounds really complicated to make. I have seen the movie Forrest Gump. I liked how he ran so fast across the football pitch. It's such a long movie and there is a lot things to remember in the movie. But I can just imagine Tom Hanks saying Life's a box of chocolates for advice to the reader. The movie is a good inspiration

[Ruth]

Very cleverly done love!
There is fluctuation in this poem, a rapid where there was calm, a storm where all was silent and yet the hope and shimmering beauty is still there!
Wonderully written love! I love you work!
Hugs xx

[LittleMadGirl]

As always .. charming =)
The structure is verry good, seems like the las constant in a world o constant change . I think it pretty intresting, that you chose a poem about change to be your first one in meter

And I like it, that you use atoms and roses in the same stanza .. it shows that everything is fleeting

There are no flaws I could see now.. it's just perfect

[Brian]

Very good and interesting poem you have here. Hope to see more like this.

[Marie Harrison]

Cool poem, I like it. The flow is great and the message is true to your heart.