Her Feinces Grave

a poem I wrote out of bordem in study hall about a guy and a girl.

Her Feinces grave

All alone              

one night 

in the

cemetary

to a prep

this would

be so scary

 

Asleep on

her feinces

grave he

could hace

been so

easily saved.

 

why did he

have to be
drunk into

the river his

body sunk.

 

alone he'll

sleep at

the bottom

of the sea

his soul is

now free

 

with a hook

they dragged

the lake

but they

could not

find his

body to

take

 

now he can

finally rest

his head

to bad he

has to be

dead.

 

-Abby Lent

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[Looouise]

Fiancée

cemetary = cemetery

could hace - have

For this stanza here:
why did he
have to be
drunk into
the river his
body sunk.; it might be better if you put a comma after 'drunk' so there's a pause. Otherwise it doesn't quite read how I'm assuming it's meant to be read.

to bad he - too

I liked the concept of the poem. :] Good write. :]