Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.
Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.
I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.
Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be th.. read moreThank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be three full stops. I put the ellipsis where it is because I wanted to create a sort of pause there. And then the last two lines should have a continuous flow to it. I like that you pointed that out though, it's made me look at the poem in a new way.
It is a lovely poem. Someone's presence is felt in the gentle gifts of nature such as 'wild flower', 'soaring bird' 'cool breeze' or 'warmth of sun'. You've written it beautifully, dear poet.
- mou
Love resting in three different places with three different gifts: beauty in nature, ' Or a soaring bird
Spiritual' and, not least, all the elemental warmth given via love divine and otherwise. Your last stanza says exactly that. Fine words, lovely poem. Thank you for sharing what should 'always be there.'
Posted 3 Weeks Ago
3 Weeks Ago
Thank you Em for sharing your thoughts on this poem. It's a beautiful thing to know that the written.. read moreThank you Em for sharing your thoughts on this poem. It's a beautiful thing to know that the written words resonate with the reader.
Some love will remain forever for true love never dies- wonderful words🌹
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Hi! Thanks for the double review ;) it's a pleasure to read them. Feel free to check out some of my .. read moreHi! Thanks for the double review ;) it's a pleasure to read them. Feel free to check out some of my other stuff if you like. I've been reading your work as well... Sorry I haven't reviewed. I'm not really much of a reviewer. But I like your writing style and most of your themes are thought provoking. I appreciate that. Have a great weekend.
Sounds like one of many times I could see my purpose in a wild flower or feel the life around me. The very touch of the still air around me laid on skin like the feel of satin blowing in a soft breeze. I felt him inside and out and when I'd forget he'd call my name. In these times I also felt mostly loved mainly because I may have stepped away long enough to forget but his love wouldn't allow me to go long enough to forget his voice or far enough to not be able hear it. I very Spiritual experience. You're blessed to see his love in the way that you do. Thank you
Such personal realizations about relationship. Yes there is an abiding presence, a near and dearness about a true love that simply exists. There are moments one awakes to the presence of the other while contemplating natural beauty or reflecting in shere awe. Thanks for opening me to these moments.
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Very much appreciate and enjoyed reading your review. It was a special feeling that came over me fr.. read moreVery much appreciate and enjoyed reading your review. It was a special feeling that came over me from a walk that afternoon I wrote this.
Love the simplicity. The three rhymes work together and my favorite lines are “In a wild flower,/Beautiful”.
Did you mean to put two full stops after “true”? I believe an ellipsis is three. I will say that I think the ellipsis would work better after “always”, but that’s just a suggestion. I’m no expert.
I especially like your word choice with “instance” and “soaring bird/ Spiritual”.
Thank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be th.. read moreThank you Rose for your thoughts on this poem and your suggestions. Yes you're right it should be three full stops. I put the ellipsis where it is because I wanted to create a sort of pause there. And then the last two lines should have a continuous flow to it. I like that you pointed that out though, it's made me look at the poem in a new way.