Mutual Surrender

hmmmm

I lust after the geometry of your being,

poised on top of me to explore,

like a birthday present waiting to be

u n w r a p p e d...

I pull you closer to me,

closer than the spaces of our kisses,

defying distance dividing the contours of our flesh

until we become

consumed with the fire void of chaste intentions,

slaves to the urgency of the moment

...and y-yesss

let's pour out our words of love into this feverish motion,

unrestricted by rhythm,

unbounded by time--

until we lose ourselves

and find ourselves

in each other

collapsed. . . . . . .in mutual surrender

Author's Note

Okay, it's been quite a long time since I last wrote a poem. Unlike before when I could write nonstop, this one took ages. Any comments would be welcome. :)

Reviews

[DrD]

It may have taken ages, but it will also be remembered for ages. I love your passion and eloquence of expression. There are times when words convey more than meaning and this is one. I was enraptured by the urgency of this writing and enjoyed it tremendously. Extremely well done.

[L4rn13]

Very nice write that grips from start to finish, the imagery depicted by your choice of wording has a huge effect on the reader. Very compelling. Love it.

[Blue]

Thanks a lot!

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

This is cool. Romantic, erotic, brilliantly written.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Greg!

[Leslie Philibert]

This is erotic but has style, well written..

[Blue]

Erotic that has style... :) Thank you, Leslie!

[Lexi Villanueva]

i love the rhyming of this poem so much87

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Alex!

[MBUYISA]

Very nice poem Arzel...well planned and i like the structure too. Easy to read and on point.

[Blue]

Thanks a lot, MBUYISA!

[Avinash]

It's like a dream, a beautiful imagination, I can wait for more of this genre from you.

[Blue]

I'm not an erotica writer but I try to cross the line every now and then. :) Thank you so much!

[Ruth]

Just beautiful hon!! Affectionate, sensual and superb! x

[Blue]

Thank you, Poppy! Glad you like it!

[La Luna]

This is really good i really loved it, thank you for sharing it.

[Blue]

Thank you, Luna!

[Donald]

I know how you feel, my poetry use to flow from my fingers. Now I have to put some effort to create my work. But with thought comes beauty and you still write beautifully.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Donald!

[Roger Turgeon]

It was worth the wait. You did a great job of capturing the anticipation and the reality of mutual surrender

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Roger!