It would have been a 'yes'

her first and last letter to him

Had you plucked up the courage to say hello

And ask for my number while I was passing the hallway,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you ‘accidentally’ brushed your shoulder against mine

And inquired if you could occupy the vacant seat beside me,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you left a note in my locker, signed with your name,

Hoping to have me as your date in the prom,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you confessed your secret on graduation day

And popped up the long-awaited question,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you chased the bus in the pouring rain

And requested me to stay in town…with you,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

 

 

 

 

But you loved me with your eyes.

Only with your eyes…

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rossen]

This poem was talking to me. It said the chance of being rejected is a scary risk that sometimes
can bring home a dream come true to those dare to try. My eye's have gotten lost in too many
silent requests of the heart. I found this poetry to be from a poignant and lovable point of view.

Top shelf ArzelJoy (Blue),100/100



Rossen

[ron]

Sometimes all we (as guys) can do is have the courage to love you with our eyes and dream of meeting you (woman). I know it sounds lame but that is the truth. It's the ones that have the courage to talk with you that are the ones to most likely only want sex. The rest of us don't feel (me) we could ever measure up to such a lovely woman inside. So we sit and dream of your yes, though it will never come, because we don't have the courage to just say hello.

At least that is how I felt in school and to some degree still feel.
This is a great poem, maybe more guys should read it and it might give them the courage to just say hello.

[Blue]

Thanks for the lovely comment, Ron! And yes, I agree! I'm not bragging but most of those who had a serious interest in me in high school never, or rarely, spoke to me except if it's concerning our assignments or weather stuff. Haha. Indeed, girls should watch out for those guys who flaunt their 'love'.

Again, thanks, Ron. It's good to know a response from a man's point of view.

[ron]

You are most welcome Blue.

[Eddie Davis]

Nice poem, Blue, speaking for all the shy guys out there, 'no' is rather traumatic. There is nothing sweeter than what might have been.

[Blue]

Thanks, Eddie. Here, it's somewhat a taboo if the girl first shows obvious signs of interest. So, it's sort of unfortunate if the guy whom she likes likes her back but does nothing about it. That inspired me to write this.

[Eddie Davis]

I see, that is indeed too bad. Girls are sometimes rather aggressive here in the States.

[Blue]

American movies gave me an impression about that. ;) Sad to say, girls here are being heavily and negatively influenced by media...

[Eric Pudalov]

Ooh, OUCH!! I think this is a safe bet, but I figure a *lot* of women have wanted to say this to the "shy guys" who don't have the nerve to speak up and just ask. Not too long ago, I *was* that shy guy; strange, something changed in me a few years ago.

But I wouldn't be married to my wife now had I not gone online and asked her out. As for the guy in this poem, I say, his loss!! :-P

[Blue]

His loss, indeed! ;) I am thrilled to know you have changed for the better, Eric. I'm sure your old 'you' would have never considered posting a video of a spoken poem on this site. Haha. ;) Thanks for your kind words!

[Eric Pudalov]

You're welcome! And no, I definitely think the old "me" wouldn't have posted those videos. I got into the whole spoken word thing in college; it was great for my confidence.

[Frieda P]

Oh the what if's in life, this reads as young infatuation and all those notions that go into it....chasing a bus in the rain, now that sounds like a sweet scene from a movie! Always an interesting ditty from your pen dear nutter. ;-)

[Blue]

Thanks for the praises. mothernutter! ;)

[Rose of many colours]

Very much A teenager's write. This piece is youthfull

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Moonera!

[Traci]

The depth of emotion was felt throughout and I kept finding myself saying "just ask", anticipating a happy ending. However, as with life....the ebb and flow isn't always in our favor. Sometimes for whatever reason we only love from afar, with our eyes, because perhaps it's safe. Lovely work as always sweet Arzel.

[Blue]

Thanks for sharing your beautiful insights, Traci. I like the part when you said that perhaps it's safer to love someone from afar... Have a blessed day!

[Eric Pudalov]

Beautiful review Traci. And I think that's true, too. Perhaps it's just meant to be that way. It can still hurt, though.