DEAD

I know this is a bit confusing but still tell me what you think

I am your wife

I am the person you called your life

But why are you ignoring me?

You are not that person who you used to be

You never listen to what I say

You just turn your back on me and walk away

Why are you ignoring my tears?

Now you don't even notice me living here

We are like two strangers living in a same home

I am living with the person I love, but I still feel alone

Every night I can hear you cry

Why aren't you talking to me?, please tell me why

You stare at my picture and cry

I have forgiven you, that's not a lie

But all my complaints were gone after what your friend said

"I am sorry to hear that your wife is dead "

Reviews

[Matty Bosox]

Now this is what I knew you were capable of Afra!!! You knocked this out of the park...Your ending to this poem would make M Nyte Shamalan (Mispelled probably) jealous!!!! From start to end you made this good, better, GREAT!!! I have read your efforts before and you have made good poems without even trying it seems...Now this is what happens when you let your talents off the leash, they go MAD!!! and make this....Close to perfection!!!

[afra]

aawwwwwww thank you sooo much ...=)

[Pax]

its not really confusing after you completely read the whole poem. the twist in the ending is really.

[afra]

thank you

[HopelessRomantic]

Wow this is amazing, I got chills just reading it

[afra]

thank you

[Betty Boop]

God you gave me goosebumps at the end. I loved it, I think the way you concluded the poem is what really makes it stand out. I would suggest trying a little near-rhyme, though it's not really necessary to be honest. (:
The only thing that bothers me a little about the poem is that I can't find the rhythm in it, (it makes it easier to "feel", and to remember.)

Otherwise bravo (:

[afra]

thank you

[Ama May Cooper]

I dont think its confusing at all to be honest, makes perfect sense is chillingly clear even. You keep us in question much in the same wife is until we here the final line. Beautifully written and an interesting read.

[afra]

thank you

[Olivia Marie]

I loved it. I was very descriptive and it has a great way of pulling together at the end. Great :) An unexpected ending :D

[afra]

thank you

[Ruth]

Saddening and actually happens a lot, I would imagine...ghosts sometimes don't move on xoxo

[afra]

thank you

[Mockingbird]

great depiction of someone who has died yet still lingers in the world of her loved one. great poem.

[afra]

thank you

[Chantel]

Whoa! That is a twist! I like it! :D

[afra]

thank you

[Jordan A. Wilson]

i like the twist. nice work

[afra]

thank you

[Stabitha]

Excellent twist to write from the perspective of the lonely ghost. I haven't seen that done before and didn't see it coming until your last line.

[afra]

thank you