THE PERSON WHO CHANGED MY LIFE

My world came to an end 

I had no one to love ,I had no friends 

Then an angel of God send for me from above 

Showed me the meaning of love 

He made me be feel beautiful and special 

He gave me a reason to stay alive 

Made me realize that I am not the only one who goes through the pain 

He gave me my smiles my happiness and my life once again 

His songs healed the scars on my soul 

And now his music makes me whole 

No matter how old I get 

I will never ever forget 

The person who showed me how to live 

The person who changed my life 

Reviews

[devon]

This is a sweet poem, and it's a great dedication to the person who did in fact change your life. :)

Again, you have some minor grammar errors.

"He gave me my smiles my happiness and my life once again", should be changed to, "He gave me my smiles, my happiness, and my life once again".


"I will never ever forget" needs to be corrected to, "I will never, ever forget".


"I had no one to love ,I had no friends" to "I had no one to love - I had no friends."

"Then an angel of God send for me from above", this line is nice, but it is confusing. Maybe change it to, "Then an angel of God, sent from above,"?

Again, your poetry is really nice and the flow is great. :)

[Chip]

It's a nice description. I have someone like that. :)

Keep writing!

[Emrys Realmskip]

Wow, very powerful work here. Great read and entertaining! it got me thinking! =)

[Btwixer]

wonderful read

[mariah]

beautiful, amazing write! and im happy for you :D
-mariah

[Harley (arbiter)]

Wow. I would dedicate this poem to someone but they would probably get really mad so nah. Great write. We all need someone like that and we all need to be someone like that

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Wow !!! If i ever meet him i will make sure he reads this poem ! I bet he would love it ! He must have been very important for you, i can see by this outstanding poem :)

[eglantine]

testify!