Long Ago, But Not Far Away

Not my usual style, again, but it is true and very simple...

 

Long Ago, But Not Far Away


Not so long ago,
The complexities of life
Were not the same
As when we were children…

The games all played,
The falsities told,
Reek havoc on the soul and mind…

I wish for the simplicity,
Hard to attain…
With the complexities of all involved.

The baggage carried,
The harm done before,
All weighs heavily...

Despite all help,

Despite any therapy,
What is in the mind stays forever…

All we can do is hope,
That our fate is not always
Wound up in what we are..

Life is what we make of it,
And though some have a distorted view,
We do what we have to…

And live the life we choose,

To do what we have to do,
It is up to us…


Agt  3 March 2009

Author's Note

....also not my usual format...just changed my program drive and it doesn't have Word and my usual fonts...but the feeling is still in the write...can you feel it? you tell me....AT

Reviews

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

All lines ring true and very correct! Oh to be in the childhood now with the knowledge I hold it would be a different upbringing! I enjoyed this poem very much its flow and rhyme were nice and smooth with a nice transition!

Lasla

[Blake Q Hatfield]

Very nice piece! I see this as a lamenting of how life beyond childhood is more complex, the things that were simple then are now not so.

[JadedSparrow]

"The baggage carried,
The harm done before,
All weighs heavily..."

Who among us can say that this particular stanza does not ring true,,,? Not you usual style but a magnificent piece none the less. This poem made me ache for the simplicities of a life almost forgotten. Bravo

JS

[Voice]

"Life is what we make of it" so true...very eye catching and eye opening write. This is a very wonderful write that really makes you think. I just love it!!!!

Voice

[Brenda Sue]

I love the last three verses. They sum it all up very nicely. Great write. Wonderfully done.

[emmajoy]

Life is what we make of it,
And though some have a distorted view,
We do what we have to�

Those words seem to be the hub of your wonderful poem.. everything you write is so true, yet, they seemed to be the moral you're putting over, i thii-i-nk

This is some piece of writing with so much heart and thought gone into it. Thank you so much for sharing.

[R J Askew]

'What is in the mind stays forerver' really catches my eye. It makes me wonder about recovery, dealing with things etc, and the capacity of the mind to self heal. I think the line is true. But I also think the mind can seal things off, much as bees seal off bad things in the hive i.e. neutralise them.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

WOW! Amanda, this was so deep and thoughtful, I found it very uplifting and optimistic.
Often, we don't know what we want from our life but sometimes. we really needs to know what we doesn't want from our life.

"Life is what we make of it,
And though some have a distorted view,
We do what we have to�
And live the life we choose,
To do what we have to do,
It is up to us�" - I totally agree with you here , it is totally upto us for how we make our life..since life is what we make out of it!

Also, I loved the way with which you wrote about this plot, since the subject is very strong but you explained your view here with such a simplicity...Very well written Amanda, like always :)

[LlamaLord]

Hm.... very simple but holds a very strong meaning :) great piece of writing. I'm sure this'll bring a lot of realization to people...
"All we can do is hope,
That our fate is not always
Wound up in what we are.."
Very powerful lines :) thanks for the read

-Austin

[~angelalala~]

"Despite all help,
Despite any therapy,
What is in the mind stays forever" i like this stanza. this is a powerful piece, straightforward, simply put. & so honest. we have to accept the life we are dealt & make the best of what we have. sometimes its hard to do, but that's all we can do. a brillian & truthful write.