Writing Love on Foggy Windows

Heartbreak Records #3//When his eyes speak and voice breaks worse than mine.

"There's a cavity in my chest 

where you come and go, 

lighting fires up to my eyes.

Your damp eyes hang 

in tiny droplets of torture

and I stroke your face saying,

'Baby, we'll be all right,'

but I know there's an emptiness 

between your bones that 

I can't start to saturate,

breaking your heart

before we even began.

Vapour collects in my chest; 

baby, you can stay here tonight,

writing stories about us in the fog

and kiss until the air becomes so warm 

our words melt and fall victim to mortality

like our love."

Author's Note

The light's falling like a golden chiaroscuro on his face, illuminating the broken amber in his eyes, and his arms reach out and tug onto my shirt.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so hard to get one to trust us when he or she has been hurt so many times...hard to convince that person that we are not the one who brought heartbreak in the first place...we are not the other.

i have been in a few relationship where that has worked both ways at the same time...and that left us at quite an impasse.

j.

[Alice Poésy]

Ah, such wise words, Jacob. Chain reactions and vicious cycles can be our biggest enemies.
read moreAh, such wise words, Jacob. Chain reactions and vicious cycles can be our biggest enemies.

That is interesting to hear. It's a constant fight of pushing each other back that unfortunately it hinders progress...

Thank you for stopping by! Always a pleasure.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This poem is unique in how you limn inner body rather than the out. It's like I don't even know what the characters look like, I just know who they are inside - amazing! And the second verse was so emotionally powerful. Great write!

[Alice Poésy]

You always flatter me so much with your generous words, Cyprian. I love focusing on the insides of who we are. I like keeping physical appearance sort of anonymous to allow room for the imagination to build. I'm glad that came across quite well :).

And thank you, thank you, thank you!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Leave it to an amazing writer as yourself to make your objectives come across, you're an amazing writer!

[Alice Poésy]

You always leave huge smiles across my face! Thank you, thank you, thank you :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome. :)

[Lorry]

a beautifully written rollercoaster ride of a day in the life of two hearts and the tug that makes heartstrings ache. The highs an unimaginable thought, only made the more fearful for how far it is to drop into the lows. Superb.

[Alice Poésy]

You use such beautiful words, Nemo, and very accurate ones.

Thank you very much. Always a pleasure to have you drop by :)

[Lorry]

You're very welcome :)

[V]

Awesome write, it reads so well and goes deep. I loved to imagine all of those scenes and the emotions tied to them, reading your writings it's always as if I'm a part of it, part of the scenes you created with words. I think that's a great talent; turning the reader into a protagonist. For some writes it's just like they're written well and even carrying feelings yet the reader stays a mere observer or flat repeater of the words, not in your case. Btw even your author's note reads so highly lovable and poetic, words like this haunt me in a good way. Always such a pleasure to read your writings.

[Alice Poésy]

You always leave such beautiful words on my writings, it's always a treat to read them. Thank you ever so much. It's always a pleasure to have you a part of the scenes, and I hope to be able to continue to do that.

Forever a pleasure to have you here and I feel so humbled by all your lush words. Thank you!

[V]

You're soo welcome. I love your stuff. Take care.