Interesting mix of images to somehow conjure a treacherous picture of slippery frustration. Well done.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I was trying to depict mistakes that are frozen in the mind remain until they melt, the pun being I .. read moreI was trying to depict mistakes that are frozen in the mind remain until they melt, the pun being I found the solution. Its a non sexual poem lol
Odd to get stuck somewhere so slippery...
Hard to get traction.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Funny fact David when your fingers are left in the bath or any water for that matter they wrinkle up.. read moreFunny fact David when your fingers are left in the bath or any water for that matter they wrinkle up so you can have that extra traction.! Thanks for dropping by.
8 Years Ago
Now that is funny... I had not thought of things in that way. Ha.
hooked by the title ... tongue on frosted pole stuck instantly in me minds eye :) i think this could be more powerful with small changes .. like make it personal in both verses or universal .. and get rid of starting a line with The ... i think your idea is fine wisdom ... we get stuck ..oh yes we do ..in a myriad of ways ... but what is the insanity ..mmmmm repeating the same mistake over and over ... or ... stuck in a mire of one stage or other of grief, guilt, or whatever!! :) love this poem .. i may be in a deeper mood than called for ..but i yam what i yam! ;}
E.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Hi E ,the original version was personal I only changed it cos of too many "my's" or "Me's". Thanks f.. read moreHi E ,the original version was personal I only changed it cos of too many "my's" or "Me's". Thanks for your insight and review!
Strindberg said.
" When I come home and sit at my writing table, then I live.... I live, and I live in manifold fashion of all human beings. I depict; I am glad with the glad, wicked with the wicked,.. more..